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Click hereYou smile when you talk
White and blinding
Disarmingly
A trust-worthy smile
But I’ve learned to see your liar’s eyes
Your words spin stories
Colorful pictures in air
A soothing, convincing tone
Coaxing my belief
But I’ve learned to see your liar’s eyes
Your hands dance
Elaborating, gesticulating,
Distracting
From your liar’s eyes
When I am with you
I’ve learned to focus
Directly into your liars eyes
So that I can see the truth.
Sometimes we do not want to know the truth but when we do, stare at his eyes to see if he blinks.
Good job.
A couple small details first — that 3rd stanza's the weakest with those gerunds in use there at its heart; in the 1st stanza, trustworthy shouldn't be hyphenated as well as a missing apostrophe in liar's in the 4th stanza. It's that 3rd stanza that should prove to be the most difficult to tweak.<P> Other than those little details, you show so well the difference between the gross obvious signs over which a person can control {voice, mouth, & gestures} and the more subtle signals that cannot so easily be controlled {the eyes}. I'm sure most people can relate to this difference.