All Comments on 'A Dark Desire Ch. 01'

by STEPHENA

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AnonymousAnonymousover 13 years ago
Hot start.

But it seems as if English is not your first language or you are using terms only familiar in the UK, or Australia, or someplace else.

AnonymousAnonymousover 13 years ago
Well, of course!

If Anonymous below was to read Stephena's biography, he/she would see that the author is ENGLISH. We non-US citizens (I'm English-born Australian) don't expect US (or any other) authors not to use terms that are US-centric, so why shouldn't this author use terms that are natural to him?

Anyway, Stephena, looking forward to part 2 asap.

Eric_ShiftEric_Shiftover 13 years ago
Maybe we Aussies/British should have a translation key we should put before a story

Or you could just google words you don't understand.

It's what I do, what especially with some conversions, kmh/mph etc.

Good story, waiting for more.

ChrisTor22ChrisTor22over 13 years ago
Can't wait for the next chapter....

Hi Stephena!!

Delightful intro and perfect pace....how sweet to effortlessly turn the young innocent into a blackmailing little prostitute!! Thirty quid for a tit rub and a swallowed first-ever blow job?? GREAT price!! Subtle but arousing suggestion that Hayley will soon join in the "business"... who knows?? Maybe she is even more submissive.... In the meantime, can't wait to see the rest of Nathalie's 18 year old body, and watch as it does things that, obviously, money CAN buy!!

Happy New Year and keep writing!!

Chris

AnonymousAnonymousover 13 years ago
good start

a very promising beginning, looking forward to the next chapter.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 12 years ago
Poorly Done

I love these type of stories but they need to be believable. They are about people with emotions not robots. Sorry. Didn't work for me.

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
Lovely story

Just what I like to read - sex with a neice.

AnonymousAnonymousover 4 years ago
18 years old

how can Hailey and Natalie be in their last year of college when they're both only 18 don't you mean their last year of high school

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