by DDDDave
Really enjoyed this. Liked that Abigail's mom had ridiculous proportions (although I hope in a future installment we at least get an idea of what her measurements are). Instead of the protagonist being the aggressor, I liked how the female took control and even stopped the protagonist from engaging in anymore sex by draining him.
Looking forward to the next installment of this story where hopefully, Abigail takes after her mom (Hint! Hint!).
Good idea for a story and a fun situation to explore, but the dialogue and flow was terrible. None of what Agatha said sounded realistic or like something an actual person would say. Also moves way too quickly, there was no subtlety or detail in the progression to sex. It's fine to lack realism in circumstance of course - that's what fantasy is - but lacking realism in writing and dialogue is simply cause for revising one's writing. The ending definitely needs revision too, the "was it a dream" ending is one of the most painful tropes imaginable to perpetuate.