All Comments on 'Anna'

The first 80% of this story was great...nice, slow but steady build-up-UNTIL he started on her toes. Out of nowhere, we accelerate from a leisurely pace to full-throttle afterburner; from coy, exciting teasing to a naked toe-fucking? It's almost as if there was a character limit, and you realized that you were nearing it...it just didn't make sense.

Also, while this story is sort of written from a 19 year old male perspective, your underlying theme of "women suck-they're all teases" gets a bit tiresome, and you confirm it at the end with "This is what women did, he thought; build up your hopes and dreams only to shatter them". As with your other story about a father and his adult daughter, your bitterness ruins a potentially great story.

Though there are some comments about the foot fetish, I don't mind. The foot fetish does nothing for me but some people get turned on by it. I don't think this story was written to appeal just to me.

I enjoyed the story very much and like the build up a lot.

I do hope you will continue with it.

Thank you.

Really liked the slow build-up and near the end it did seem to race and then come to a sudden stop. I'm not sure what you're attempting here but perhaps the next chapter will explain the frustrating ending. Well written and good editing though.

In real life, I have no problem with mutually consensual incest between adults. What two adults want to do is no one business other than the adults involved. The only thing I hate, both in fiction and real life, is a tease. In this story, I hope the son develops a spine. If the mother really wants a "Daddy" then he should be "Daddy".