All Comments on 'Bread and Butter'

Thank you.

Awaiting chapter 2

Damn........ That's good.

Like jetpacksam, waiting anxiously for further chapters.....

But the switching of tenses, even in mid-sentence was horribly distracting. Numerous grammatical errors and typos. Please, get an editor.

Beautifully constructed and well paced. A few gramatical errors require polishing. You may well turn out to be a natural storyteller.

Part 2? Looking forward to it.

Looking at the timeline of postings for this author, I don't believe additional chapters are planned or queued. Life happens. Great first chapter for something more.

Good but the story wandered between current and past tense

Good story concept, but I only got half way thru the first page. The moving between past and present tenses, the choppy sentence structure, dangling modifiers and erratic punctuation were too distracting.