All Comments on 'Denise'

please. Good start. Nicely realistic. Not too many typos. Good word pictures.

I've read a heck of a lot worse on here. Very good story and a good start.

I thought your writing was quite good. Got your Genes mixed up though. Gene Wilder: Chocolate Factory. Gene Hackman: French Connection. I completely understood who you were speaking of though so no big deal. : )

Really enjoyed your story, please write more.

enjoyed your first effort..and now can hardly wait for another offering.you seem to have a nice convincing manner in your prose..well done

"Their home was littered with his empty beer bottles and her empty dreams."

Let's have more older woman/young guy stories with the lingerie and panty fetish, too.

I thought it was just an excellent story. Thank you for sharing it with us.

Hey there,

WOW a greta story from OZ myself had alot Aussie vernacular,

It was sexy and sensual and i enjoyed the whole ride

Hope you writing more

really enjoyed this story - cant wait for the next one...

I thoroughly enjoyed your story. It's very much believable and true to life, not the normal 10" stud and horny housewife screwing like rabbits thing most writers give us. Loved the part where the cunt hair was found and the only thought was that it was from Denise's cunt, how typical for a teenager in heat. My heart was pounding along with him when he was first checking out Denise's panty drawer and finding her treasures. He wasn't the only one with a wet spot, lol. The ending was somewhat of a let down, but again very believable and fitting the story. Thanks for a well done story and hope to see more from you.

great story well writtem, more please

I like this. I want more, please.

Keep writing-----I really enjoyed your story and style

Really hard to believe it's the first one you've written!

Looking forward to more.

Just found this story after searching 'mature' and 'crotchless panties'. I loved it. Very real too which I find so refreshing on Lit. Must catch up with your latest story and please more 'panty' stories

got me real hard just reading

2nd page...absolutely loved it

gave you a big 5...write more