All Comments on 'Kalpana & "Sir" Ch. 02'

Just saw your new story. Welcome back after a long hiatus. I haven't even begun to read your story but I am sure I would love it as I have loved all your previous stories. Hope you are well and will continue writing.

So well written. My wife and I were both excited reading this. Can't wait for the next chapters. Keep it up!

Why insert dialog in Hindi, followed by a translation?

If a person cannot read Hindi it is only useless strings of characters that have to be ignored. There is nothing "convenient" about skipping the useless characters. That puts the responsibility on the reader, when it is up to the writer to make good decisions, and write consistently within the story (i.e., in English). It does not even add to realism, for example, as an occasional phrase here and there might add a sense of strangeness to a particular character.

A little quicker though. If each chapter is going to be this short, you need to get to the point quicker. Or have longer chapters. I want her boss to fuck her, send her home to the husband who spends long lengths of time sucking it out before he mounts her.

Spend more time on how he digs in with his tongue to scoop it out. The taste, his feeling and lust while he swirls it in his mouth before swallowing. More time needs to be spent on the taste and how he feels while sucking out a full load of sperm.

You got some skills man, A worthy story. On literotica after a long time, hope to get an update soon.

Both Ch. 1 & Ch. 2 are my cup of tea... & then some!!

This is a sex story & a love story 2-in-1.

KALPANA IS A KEEPER. She is a very very appealing woman. Our maker somehow made her too appealing (which can cause problems).

Kapil LOVES Kalpana truly, madly, deeply. Perhaps he loves her too much. His love for her is both selfless AND kinky (*). However he is not fully aware as yet that he has a strong voyeur/cuck-wannabe side although it is already affecting his emotions & his decision making. He is not yet ready to admit to himself, let alone to Kalpana, that he would still love her, & keep her, even if she had sexual relations with other men.

THE STORY IS VERY VERY REALISTIC!

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(*) his kink is to share his wife with other men &/or watch other men hit on her &/or watch her as she aggresively flirts with other men.

Dear I too write and am a bit proud of my stories. But I am no match for you dear. You are very very good. Your English is better, your writing is superb and you know how to take the reader to a high and yet keep hankering for more. Wow Wow Wow

I greatly appreciate your comments, Iloveall! I hope you will enjoy my other stories too!