All Comments on 'Marissa Ch. 04'

I would hate to see your version of a nightmare. If you are married or have a female partner I really hope she is fucking people for money while you sit at home jerking off thinking about it.

On and on with more garbage, your one sick fuck.

I think you are starting to lose the people with the story. If this is the turning point you would not lost any more of those that think this is stupid. Suggestion would to look at other long novels on here. Some do go on for 40+ installments while other ones only go for 6 chapters. I guess it all depends if you want the audience to come back or not.

No redeeming qualities for your characters. Kill 'em all, let God sort 'em out.

crappy ending to a crappy story

until hubby finds out what a whore she is. This story is just crap. Please stop trying to write any more stories, it is cruel and unusual punishment.

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What a pile of unmitigated garbage. Either you, the author, are just trying to piss people off...or you are one sick person. Maybe both. Meanwhile, if you persist in writing stories such as this, do the world a favor and take a long walk on a short pier.

Let me see...a cop puts cuffs on a women than has her blow him. What if she bit it off? What could he say, other than oh shit! She literally has him by the balls even if her hands are handcuffed. He can't claim she made him do it! What a bunch of crap.

You left all the readers hanging with this one, the final chapter. I won't even score this because you have not finished the story. An editor would be helpful as well.

I was interested in seeing how you resolved this. But there is no resolution There is also no heroine/hero. This is the second time in two days a submission said o9ne thing and did another. Is this going to become a trend here?

So the loving and supportive husband never finds out what a nasty piece of filth he is stuck being married to? That's a load of bull!

I like this story for the realistic ending. A married women in that business could easily be scared straight by being raped and threatened with an arrest. This ending is more likely than an angry confrontation and a divorce.

is good about this story? I fail to find it.

If that is an ending, then I'm a monkey uncle.

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Notice that she is still only thinking of herself: "Maybe, if I don't end up in jail or a junkie first." No thought about the husband except safety.

Sorry, but everybody in this story (no matter how well written) should be feed into a mulching machine and composted.

p.s. This also the kind of trash that would go crazy if the husband just looked at another women.

You're making her sound weak to Barnes. A stronger character, although unusual. would make a more interesting read.

1 Star, and even that is to much!!!!

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Great storyline,I have read the neighbor stories as well as the Marissa stories.Please keep it going...

All your stories have been excellent. Don't listen to anonymous posts. keep writing.

she was a slut from the moment she didn't tell her husband about being forced and to find this sexy is like asking Charles Manson to give marriage advice.

I loved reading this story....5 Stars for me !

Any chance to add more chapters ? Can Terry use her again and make her a real whore working in his clubs ?

The heroine of the story was on dumb slut, allowing helself to involved in what would eventually be prostitution while she was married. What benefit did she receive for risking her marriage, her family and her husband's love ? The author makes it quite clear at the end that she is about to be blackmailed if she decides to quit. Isn't that fucking neat ! A whore for the life of her marriage.

Hopefully you were shot in a drive by.

that way I don't feel like I wasted near as much time as I could have...

Excellent narrative and sex - very hot - in the first two chapters: "5" each, no complaints.

Ending for the series was soft and rushed, had to limit approval to a "4".

One of the most awful stories on literotica. An author who thinks the positive feedback

he gets has to do with his writing! It's only from perverts who gets her rock off by cuckold/wimp themes!!! You can not write!!!!

If your still do lit u need to finish this one.

More shit wasnt possible!!!

Loved the Marissa stories well written the erotica in them was amazing i hope there is going to be more

Don't listen to the negative crap. You are a gifted writer and you certainly don't need an editor. I read Neighborhood and Mel 1-4 straight through. I enjoyed the story a lot and hope you decide to keep going. And, by the way, I don't see the need for a definitive ending. Unlike most critics, I have an imagination. If you aren't inspired to keep going with Marissa, would you mind if I picked up where you've stalled?

Just crap.

Disappointing follow up to the excellent There Goes the Neighborhood. Well written but lacks the tension and a subtle undercurrents of the original. Unfinished and hopefully the next episode, if there is one, takes the story up a notch.

LA

I'm guessing Marissa's marriage would not t last. You don't have that kind of additive and duplicitous personality and keep it secret in a real marriage. That woman would find herself without family, and perhaps so fucked up she ended up in prison, a mental institution, or just dead. Hopefully the marriage would dissolved before the spouse got stuck with the results. Now that would be an interesting sequel. Not to sound brutal but this character just comes across as a shallow narcissist which is how she got entrapped. Imagine her with children. Yikes!

I had a.girl I left in Vegas I had done all I mean all one could do. The 2 pimps him her live great while we try to help that's all we have. The story hit a fire in.me I don't like to feel.

Awful story. Execrable characters. Ugh.