All Comments on 'Obvious, in Retrospect'

continue this story its really hot!!! please!

for the story. but it was not erotic.

Didn't like the content..didn't turn me on. However, I don't believe we are here to play morality patrol like some of you below. What a waste to read stuff that bothers you so much you have to score zero for revenge. You could see in one paragraph where this story was going. Why read it then? Just so you can play Natzi and take out your narrow morality on people who think differently than you?

The plot is pathetically boring - it is readable but not erotic in sense of the word. No character development, but that figures if there is no premise for a plot device. 25% for posting but that is indeed a stretch. So, once again, what is the point of this wasted effort?

To those that didn't like the content, complain about cock stories, sluts, etc etc. Would you read loving wives if it the content didn't have controversy,slut wives, cheating wives, cheating husband, etc etc? Doubtful! Why bitch about a story content that you read from first word to last. If you have moral issue or are biased against "loving wives" stories, as Anon below pointed out, why are you on an erotic site.

I have no idea what some of the other commenters are talking about. I found this story very hot, and look forward to more of your work. Thanks, ohio

you have the start to a good story. Just expand more on how the swapping took place and also you said something in the beginning of the story that you should expand upon as well and that was the comment if she fully came back to him. that comment right there could open up a new can of worms.

Down the tubes, doesn't seem very commited or a whole lot of love anyway, having trouble careing, these people don't seem worth the effort.

Could not care about any of the 'characters'; could hardly finish reading this.

Mostly good story, but confusing beginning and ending.

Chris walks into the house to help with the beer. Taylor says she has it taken care of. He walks out and finds Penny screwing John. That took what? - 5 minutes?<P>

Penny thought he was screwing Taylor in the house? How long did she wait before straddling John - 15 seconds? Doesn't fly. She is shocked to see Taylor and Chris return so quickly? But is now so enamored with John's cock that she doesn't care that Chris sees her screwing him? She is trying to get pregnant but has unprotected sex with John at her most fertile time? Chris then has sex with Taylor as revenge? Because they are now going to swing together? Does Penny get pregnant? Does Taylor? By whom? Penny is not coming back to Chris? Because she loves John's big cock? Because she loves John? How could she have lost her love for her husband, with whom she was trying to make a baby, so quickly? <P>

You really left this one wide open. I have to knock you down on that.<P>

Thanks for sharing.

What were you using when you wrote this? Alcohol or something stronger? Next time try writing sober

and erotic. The problem is all in the first day. Everyone slowly got involved and there was only one possible result.

This is the first story in a long time that perhaps a situation like this is going to produce a baby that will have a daddy that is not married to its mommy and vice versa. A very erotic situation and I'm looking for more....much more, hopefully in Chapter 2?

Chris and Taylor aren't portrayed as getting it on until AFTER their return home!

Big Grinch: The process of John seducing Penny is almost totally missing. Either his efforts needed to be more overt (despite Penny quashing his blatant approach several weeks before), or the author needed to incorporate a second PoV, such as Penny or maybe - tougher but sexier - Taylor working as John's winglady. As it is, the single most erotic aspect of this tale is wasted. Other wasted scenarios include the follow-up John-Penny contacts, and the Chris-Penny post-cuckold interactions!

4*. (Coulda been a contendah!)