All Comments on 'The Sperm Bank'

Chapter 2 please. Hypnotic Femdom does it for me

That was really good! I don't often see a mind control story where the girl traps the guy. You pulled it off wonderfully. If you do decide to continue it, I have some questions for you to consider. The contraption used to brainwash Josh, why is it in a sperm clinic? Is it really a sperm bank or something more nefarious? Is this a secret society/organization that sells this service to a select few? If it is just a clinic, what is it doing there? How does Liz know how to work it? Is Liz more than just a nurse? Is this the start of a harem for Liz? Was she just interested in Josh, but spurned, decided to get him anyway she could? If so, will she even want him when the novelty of control wears off? In which case, what does she do with him then? I ask all these questions in the hope of you coming up with ideas to continue with the story. Thanks for your work.

...it was a surprise....and a good one.

It seemed Liz had figured something out about the equipment and used it (probably contrary to her oath of ethics) to her own purposes.....to capture and enraptured the man she wanted.

She should have several babies with him, before tiring of him and moving on to someone else.....or they should marry and live blissful lives....until he somehow de-programs and figures out what she did to him....then the hurtin' starts.

Yeah, yeah.... dat's it, dat's de ticket!

Thank you.

I'm usually a MDom guy, but this was a very well written story and drew me in. I hope you continue it.

My cock is hard as a rock now and I haven't even touched it, I can't wait to read more about these two people.

Liz and Josh are work - out partners. Invited to make a donation at the sperm clinic, Josh is hooked up to a machine which draws the sap from his body. The feeling is so ecstatic hat Josh wants more. With a stoked libido, Josh can have everything: coming home to Liz and a work out on the machine. Will Josh take the bait?

It's an interesting kind of love story.

Where is the boundary between dream and reality

Hooked up to a sperm extraction machine which puts the subject into a dream like state, is the appearance of the attendant nurse in a bathrobe without underwear real or part of the imagining? Ending up at the nurse's place has the dream turned into reality?

You need an Editor and proofreader