by Sabledrake
I had the game operation in head as I read this novel glory hole sort of tale. I liked it
Fantastic story. Thought it was pretty good to begin with, but once you switched to the female point of view it went off the charts. Great job and keep up the good work.
The sugue to the female's point of view really pushed the eroticism level to new heights, and the discovery that the willing lass was his dream girl, Tessa, made it all the better!
{sigh} I wish there'd been Halloween parties like this when I was growing up!
I loved your story. It made me wish we had Halloween in my country too.
Good luck.
I'm very glad you all liked the story and took the time to read it and leave feedback. It was a lot of fun to write.
Great stuff! Nice attention to detail, and way cool concept. The perspective switch was perfect, and the foreshadowing to the surprise ending, all worked, and worked really well. Now I'm gonna have to go back & work on my own stuff that much harder. Thanks for raising the bar. :)
It's hard to change perspective like this mid-story without sounding awkward. That this author can do it well is a definite plus. The actual sex could have been longer and more detailed. Otherwise, I thoroughly enjoyed this. Good luck!!
But I expect nothing less from this author. Wonderful and the change in perspective was perfect. Good luck!
That's writing other writers can appreciate and reading all readers can enjoy. Good work. SD.
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The sensousness of the mysterious touching and the unknown female, culminating in the revelation of his crush was so beautifully concieved, I didn't see it coming, But I am so glad you did.