by eroslit
Really enjoyed your story. One suggestion, though: your story needs to be longer. Their sex only lasted a couple of paragraphs. If you had a lover that was that quick, he'd be a former lover before his cock even started to dry.
I do know how sex feels, I have had a lot of practice, I do love the moment of surrender and you did that very well.
I loved it ^_^! I always wanted a little sister and this story just melted my heart. Not that i'd want to do my own sister *whistles* but it was very good :)
This story is a good illustration of the reason I read the incest category. Two people who care deeply about each other having an erotic interlude or a whole series of them together. I don't like forced sex and don't like brutality but do like romance, and I'm a bit old-fashioned and prefer it to be a male and a female, I'm not being judgmental - I don't care what people enjoy as long as no one is hurt or misused, I read for my own enjoyment and therefore read the things I like. I liked this story.
I like this story a lot. I could "see" what you were writing and it got me "turned on." Thanks.
I love this! Very exciting, it made me very hard, and I am going to read this again and masturbate! What a sexy, erotic story! Thank you for writing this, it is so well told, detailed, with touches of the naughtiness that is inherent in incest tales. I really, realy enjoyed reading this, and I will be reading more of your submissions. Thank you!
Tom, from Wisconsin
tommydee58@yahoo.com
A gift like that should have aroused suspicions from the parents, but who cares. A nice sweet story. I like sex in the shower and I know just the nephew that can give to me. Long and thick and again and again. I want him to wear me out. Leave me begging for more. Fuck I can hardly wait!!!!
way to rushed wheres the background? wheres the character development? this should be chapter two of three NOT A STAND ALONE STORY. you never tell us anything about them, who are they and what were their feeling slike about each other before this. why weren't the parents suspisious or upset when he gave her the sexy top? why wasn't she upset or suspisious when she opened the top? this needs a total rewrite by a GOOD WRITER. you wrote the storyso you know what is happening but we aren't in your head so it is your resopsability to explain everything to us. unfortunatly you FAILED to do that.
Amazing that this 'camisole' was hidden on my machine all these years.
A delightful but not overdone story.
That was really good, and for a change the brother was realistic! None of the whiny-assed b.s. So many authors write them as :)
Thanks for the good story, even if it was a bit short!
The set up is good. But he goes from seeing her in the camisole to having her naked to fucking in a nanosecond.
And the idea that he made her cum with his hand twice more... If true, the situations and actions should have been described in detail.