by Daniellekitten
I really like the way this story is going! Please keep posting it!!
fit. Such as the one that says those of you who can write should and those of you who are complete idiots leave hurtful comments of those of them that can write. I hope Danielle that you will remember those of us that enjoy every gem you pull from your head. I look forward to each and every chapter you pull out. Take good care, sweet Danielle. And to hell with those who aim so low.
It's still a tad confusing, but I'm sure the background will come. I like the set up(s), and am curious to meet this Angel character. I just know he'll show up... right? :)
Please ignore anonymous below. I am one of the people that enjoys longer stories and the more complex and interesting storylines and characters that go with them. There are a lot of people on this site that are not looking for a simple stroke story. Some of us look for quality in writing. If they don't enjoy good long quality writing, then they shouldn't read your work. No need to be rude about it. I can't believe some people.
hmmm..i like this edgy, multiple personality tara/rayne character. great job!!!!!!
This story is really interesting please continue.
Hey, a love story with a schizophrenic that's actually very well written, hot, and interesting. Great. Hope we get more of these characters. Tara/Rayne sort of reminds me a little bit of a character named Moka from a Japanese anime/manga called Rosario+Vampire. Its a story where a timid average guy is unwittingly enrolled into a school for ghouls (vampires, goblins, demons, etc) even though he's an unremarkable human boy. He befriends and falls in love with a bit of a ditzy girl named Moka who is a vampire. Moka's a rather friendly vampire that's really ditzy but she likes the guy (Tsukune) and especially likes drinking his blood (she refers to drinking his blood as a kiss even though it doesn't really kill Tsukune or make him a vampire). However, Moka wears a rosario to keep her "inner-self" contained. When it's removed she becomes "Adult Moka" which is like Moka turning into a badass, seductive femme fatale type. Its still Moka but an alternate personality.
Not saying its a ripoff. Just reminded me of that story a little bit. I think this totally works too and I want to know a lot more about Rayne and where she came from as well.
This one is a brilliant writer, well ok, she will be if and when she gets any of her stories to a conclusion.One of the rules set in stone is that a story has a beginning, a plot and an ending. She get the beginning and the plot, but nobody ever told her that a story needs an ending. Pity, because she really, really is a brilliant .....plotter perhaps?
Dawid 1501 I have to agree with you especially n this story. Definitely needs a third and maybe even more chapters to finish it.... Other than that she is a very good writer.....