by lovecraft68
Great job, I know this was all in fun, but its actually really good, some good phrasing and a nice rhythm to it. Obviously your title came from the immortal Peanuts special and now I'm thinking Lucy and Linus? Charlie Brown and Sally? Good Grief!
within us fans a secret flame "
No truer words have been spoken.
I loved your poem so much that read it numerous times. You're such an awesome poet, Laura.... :) Stella
I loved your poem, I have no one to share it with, but if I did i gladly would. My wife would not understand. I enjoy your stories also...
I love the pacing and rhythm. It carries it's cadence all the way through. Beautiful use of language. Bravo.
I think you can sing this to any reel with eight bar phrases, but alas it's only 7 phrases. If it were eight there would be lots of 32 bar and 64 bar tunes to fit it.
Sorry. i read it, but I really have no comment except I think your gift is story telling. Hope you will return to share that gift with us.