All Comments on 'Anna's New Job'

she needs to take that giant cock in per pussy!

Wow. For a new writer you hit a homerun with this one. I love the concept. Hope you continue with this story as I'd love to know more of Anna's exploits.

3 stars

DragonRider55

and an enjoyable read. You shouldn't be so self critical about your language - there are native English speakers on here who are 10 times worse! Keep writing.

For someone where English isn’t your first language, I couldn’t find any faults with the story. Looking forward to reading more from you as a writer. I could see this story develop with more parts if you wanted to.

Keep up the good work.

From your forward, I was expecting a story that had clear errors, clunky wording, and the like. Imagine my surprise when I found it was a well written, well thought out story that had no significant errors. You should feel proud of your mastery of English, for your first story is far better than most writer's 100th!

I look forward to reading many, many more

Great first effort. Keep on writing.

Awesome story and very well written! Can’t wait to read more!

Well written, sexy story. I don't think you need any help with your writing or editing but if you want I'm happy to proof read and give advice. My stories are on here and if i can be of help just email me x

Good story, well written. You have absolutely nothing to fear with your writing. To sum it up, I gave you a 5. Hope you have more chapters in the works.

If you can add more dialogues and incest it would be awesome!

In English the personal possessive utilizes an apostrophe. So 'Avas', as in 'it belongs to Ava', is correctly written as Ava's. That's the only error I could find in this wonderful story. Thank you so much for sharing it with us. 5 stars. If you do a second part, Let Anna think back to how she got here before moving ahead too fast. More of her background and motivations. How nervous was she? Guilt? Remorse? Or is she determined to get more on-the-job-benefits now that she's tasted the good life? And how does she feel about girls - as in hugging and pressing naked breasts together, in addition to swapping cum in a post BJ kiss? Love it - more please!

great job and hope you do some more chapters. This Story is simply amazing!!!!!!

I really love this story. I hope you continue this story. Cant wait for more.

Well written story and very hot! Me and my cock thank you!

Wasn't sure at first, since the premise of interviewing for a job seemed far-fetched. But the dialog and plot were good, once I got a few paragraphs into it. Believable characters, realistic emotions and reactions from our heroine.

I hope you continue this plot and story line. I can think of several plot lines, if you want a few ideas. Keep up the good writing...you're keeping me UP! *wink*

For you to say you didn't have a good grip on English, you certainly did a good job. Look forward to chapter 2.

Dropped this story part way through because I found something really sickeningly unpleasant. A guy watching his daughter have sex with someone else, I don’t know if this is meant to represent blood relatives, related via marriage or if it’s a Daddy Dom with Little but as I find that vomit inducing too it’s a bit of a moot point.

This should be tagged as Incest/Taboo.

Anna need's more adventure.