All Comments on 'Aunty Alice Pt. 01'

All aunts and nephews should experience such uninhabited sex.

This format...

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-Oh Christ. Oh my fucking God, she yelled as she convulsed, thrusting her crotch and bum in the air.

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is bullshit! Quotation marks are not just for the beginning of a line of dialogue, but also for separating dialogue from the narrative.

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"Oh Christ. Oh my fucking God!" she yelled as she convulsed, thrusting her crotch and bum in the air.

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Any 10 year old child knows this. What's your excuse?

How do you slide two middle fingers in her vagina and one in her butt ? You only have two .Story seemed rushed. More details and some femdom would have made it better

Really, don't bullshit your readers: Open up. ADMIT you like obese women, STOP pretending that obese women aren't obese, and EMBRACE the fetish. But even before you do that, can you please spend a few minutes learning what fucking quotation marks are for?

Oh, and regarding "Very Fun Read": "All aunts and nephews should experience such uninhabited sex."

It's uninhibited, you dumbass, not uninhabited.

I agree with the comment above. They should have uninhabited sex! Outside, no domicile, permanent or temporary.

Yes there are mistakes, but I really don't see the need for such angry and aggressive feedback. I enjoyed the story and with a half decent editor and not such an abrupt ending, it would have been much enhanced. Good effort, hope there is more to the story.

Sweet! 1 page the perfect example of what Short stories is, really better than A lot writer , thx

Short and to the point but why didn't she piss in his mouth. nice..

A women dressed in black silk/satin you just can;t beat that

Great story though, Thank you...10/10