by Many Feathers
Well done, gently with a very sensual approach.
Please continue.
That was an excellent story that you wrote. Please continue story. crh
Much too materialistic, especially on a first date. In fact, doing just some of what he did on a first date would send a warning signal to a lot of women I know. All of that together? Bright red flashing strobe lights and air-raid sirens. They'd be wondering: what's wrong with him that he has to distract me with all this... stuff?
Besides, what is he going to do for an encore?
Have to wonder if you even finished the story. If you DID in fact read it, you'd know that nothing at all actually happened. Thus, your perspective on this first date is flawed in fact.
I'm slowly working my way through all your writing. You have a real talent with words, descriptions and drawing the reader in. Nicely done on this one too.
even though this isnt realistic, this was written so well that it drew me in. i liked how the story progressed and the fact that it was a dream helped with the realism a bit. i'm also a big fan of ur other stories.
If that was her fantasy he has a lot to live up to. I would love to read what actually happened and the aftermath
Pity the story finished so short, another chapter or even better “story two” I would have given a better mark (star)?