All Comments on 'Bedtime Blow'

Damn that was a good read after a long time. Please write part 2 fast.

A good read. Eagerly waiting for the next part.

Hi I loved it but it was a little distracting that some of the pronouns were wrong! it should say “she was stroking her brother’s balls” or “she was kissing his balls.” The pronoun should match whoever has ownership over it (she “owns” her brother and he “owns” his balls). Overall tho that was amazing and I couldn’t have written a better story!!!

I hope you write a second part where its more than a blow job

4 Stars. Good story, you've seemed to almost completely convert the story to English with the exception of the improper use of 'him' and 'her' in your story. I suggest you have someone versed in English proofread your work, but don't stop writing!