All Comments on 'Beyond His Control'

You end by saying "what had he done" didn't you mean what had they done ?

She may have been only 18 but he didn't force her ; he just took advantage of his situation to induct her into the hall of shame , if that's how he feels .

Easy to read and a sexy quick release now for a Chapter 2??? Liked the theme and you imagination. Thanks.

I hope not too severe. It's a really good little story, but I think it could be even better with more chapters.

It's realistic. In fact, the whole situation was pretty realistic. Very well written. What had he done? to the commentor above, I think as the older brother he feels responsible for what happened... which is understandable.

More please. I loved reading this story & I hope you will continue with more parts. It is a great beginning.

I loved reading this story, it is great. Please write more chapters to it soon.

Wonderful start, you need to continue this story. It is too good to leave unfinished.

Did you read your story before you sumitted it?

i loved it except seriously

it shouldve had more posted with it

I discovered this after reading your new story. Fantastic!

The story line is plausible and the story is essentially well written, except . . . the typos in this story are terrible. There are words misused. All of the details aboout the brother being a lawyer are terribly wrong (e.g., you don't start law school directly from high school, you don't become a partner in an established law firm at the age of 27, etc.) Use an editor and stick with factual matters that you truly do understand.

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And before atoms could split he was leaning in and kissing her back.

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Ooh, I like that one, hehe, something new! :)

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And other times slow and sensual, he'd nibble on her lips or she'd run her tongue lightly along the roof of his mouth.

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No, I wasn't going to comment on starting the sentence with the word and, I was actually jealous of her long ass tongue!! Lol ;). ...I remember watching some daytime talkshow somewhere, hosted by a woman I think, they would occasionally bring out folks that could do interesting things. This boy came out, say nine or ten years old, and his trick was that he could touch his eyebrows with the tip of his tongue!! They panned the audience... You've never seen so many grown women all getting this pedo-stalker-kidnapper look on their faces all at the same time! Rofl. The janitors prolly had a lot of drool to mop off the floor after that show!

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He might regret later not taking things more slowly, not replicating for her the pleasure she had given him just moments before, but right now he had only so much time left before anticipation alone would bring his climax. So without even removing his pants, he lowered himself over and into his baby sister.

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Rofl!! That is pretty fucked up! The boy needs some cool-down time to take the edge off so he doesnt blow in ten seconds, hehehe!

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His cell phone rang and he started at the sound, feeling as if he'd been caught in the act of a heinous crime, so he left her. "Hello?" He asked as he stood up, taking his pants in one hand with him.

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Lol, what kind of idiot answers the phone before, during or after sex?!

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Help me up, please?" Gabby asked quietly, forcing him to turn around and take her hand. When she stood, she began adjusting her bra over her boobs and Walker looked down, not able to meet her eyes. But below the hem of her short pleated skirt came peeking his white, treacly sperm and he groaned, looking away.

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Aww... What a douche! Wont even look at her!! Ive never really got after-guilt for doing things...

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We'll talk when I get back."

He made his way to his bedroom, shut the door and leaned against it. He'd have banged his head on it a couple times but he feared she would hear it.

What had he just done?

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...turned into Super-Doucheman!! Hahsha!

Well excellent story so far!! Yay! :)

Ever heard of spell check? I got about 4 paragraphs in and had to give up.

I need part two.

Really enjoyed this. 5 Stars because of the crafting you did with the character. Wonderful story telling.

Where does this take place? At first, I thought the family was from England or perhaps Australia, since the author kept using British terms rather than American terms. E.g., the author said spoilt instead of spoiled, the main character attended university instead of attending college, and the author's family took a vacation to Morocco. However, the lead character then went to an Ivy League School and upon graduation moved to New York to become a lawyer, rather than moving to London to be a solicitor or barrister. So I never did really grasp where this family lived, or how the author ended up with this odd mix of British and American words and phrasings.