All Comments on 'Body Shop'

Loved the character qualities, the build up of the scenario, the pace ... well done!

Totally loved this story!

Michelle

Really well written . Great build up and highly erotic too. 5 stars for sure.

I was finding it fun and enjoyable until their conversation. Unless I was dating a complete moron, if I described myself the way he did, I'd have been kicked in the nuts and laughed at. It comes off like cheesy "player" speak. Her dialogue is equally cringing.

I like the premise, and it's reasonably free of errors. But the dialogue....

I just want to know when the wedding is? I cried when it ended.. Thank you so much for writing this. It was the best story I've read so far.

This is the only story worth reading of all of the other stories shown in the last two weeks.

I like the romance in the story. Nice work man!

Matthew Robbins, being the very smart cookie that he is, has to stake a claim on that woman. Intelligent, beautiful, sexy, witty, and with a '67 Mustang, she sounds like a perfect match for Matt. I'd say this story needs a Chapter 2.

Good luck in the Summer Lovin' contest.

Excellent erotica, and a wonderful romance. The plot was original, the characters written well, and you brought it all together seamlessly.

You wove Matt and Melanie as a couple so perfectly that we know exactly what will transpire. A very satisfying end.

Thank you,

M1*****

It lacks a genuine flow... A story written with general diction.. The lack of detail makes it a boring read. I quit reading a page and a half into it. Has potential... Dialogue needs more realism/humor

She kind of seemed like Minnie Mouse on uppers.