All Comments on 'Connecting with Amber'

Oh this situation was hot and so very sexy. Myself I would have had her ass, her throat and anything else i could reach. Yes it would be cheating, but sometime the little head has to run things. (5 stars)

Reading this sitting at my desk at work, wishing i had an Amber to bend over my desk. Hope to read chapter two....

Amazing, but full of grammatical and spelling errors. Get an editor or, if you already have one, get a better editor. The 'your'/'you're' thing was incredibly frustrating....

from the male point of view but I doubt many women could go from relative novice to deep throat artist in one easy lesson. Also, all this flirting took place in an office full of people including other men who were drooling over Amber themselves. Don't you think tongues were wagging? It's pretty hard to wear what Amber wore without people noticing and doing the math. And if they had such a good jobs, why did the protagonist and Amber risk it all to have sex in the office, even late at night? I point out these plot weaknesses because they detract from an otherwise well written and pretty hot story. Better proof reading would help, too.

Great story, great build-up and tease. We definitely need more chapters. Ambers ass is still waiting to be fucked!

Excellent story. Somewhere down the line of this story (which I hope has many chapters) maybe Amber and Damian should make a POV movie for Darren where Amber does every whorish thing she wants and then leave it on Darren's computer. Possibly get Janet involved too....

This is my first story and I have a lot to learn as some have pointed out. I'm working on chapter 2 now but it wont be ready for a little while yet.

Thanks again for the feedback.

This is a great story and continues nicely in chapter 2. I wouldn't be inclined to dwell on the comments that have a problem with your spelling, etc. If people are more focusing on the spelling then they're missing a great story line. There are thousands of stories on here that are grammatically perfect but as boring as heck!!

Keep up the great work.

I think your story is hot, but please... your = possession and you're = you are. As in "I think you're amazing." It's a bit of a nitpick, but seriously distracting. Other than that, I really loved the story!

Good story, thanks.

Hi this story is awesome! Still hoping for the other chapters man!