All Comments on 'Control, COMPLETE Control Ch. 01'

Nice idea of a story.

Too many spelling and grammar errors.

Change of narrator from third person to first person with a total new setting. something is amiss where it changes.

I disagree with the first commenter

Very well written. Subtle, and fun plot.

Maybe the difference between US and UK English confuses some less discerning readers...

Looking forward to more.

Chapter 2 please...?

Looking forward to it...very much

Damp panties here...

Any chance we get to know the website?

or at least another chapter? Please

fool on here is annony! He reads all of these stories and then bitches about them. he's really fucking nut!! Seek help ass hole of LIT and do it today!!