All Comments on 'Cotton Eye Joe Pt. 05'

Author writes prolifically on the cuckold theme yet his relationships have unique dynamics that expand my image of femdom. Excellent.

I don't like the denigrating of another human being, but the story gets 5 stars because it evinces the outrage, anger and sadness I feel from seeing the twisted dynamic in this dysfunctional, three-legged relationship. That's an effect of good writing.

I like the authors use of dialogue and characterization. The one critique I'd give is to stop mingling past and present tense. The story is told in past tense, but once in a while, the writing lapses into present tense, and should not. Use one, or the other. I don't know if it was written in one tense and changed to another, and not caught, or if it was intentional, or if the author realizes it's happening, but to change from we wanted, then went, he did, they said, to so I go, he says, they do, is jarring and takes me as the reader completely out of the story. It stops the flow, and it's disorienting.

Other than that, well done.