All Comments on 'Daddy for Dessert'

Not a outstanding story (thats why it is not listed as HOT.) and I was not moved by the same old story line with

little more than a name change. Do I feel you can do better?, You Bet.

because your story sure read like you were writing against a deadline. Take your time. The story HAD potential. Now it is just another rushed submition.

Are you going to finish it?

Good initial buildup, however, it seemed like it had a deadline. Rush, Rush ... oh baby baby cum to me...