All Comments on 'Fairy Falls'

First story!

Congratulations. 'Fairy Falls', 'Cougar Rock Campground' - perfect names for the place of interest, almost thought you'd made them up. Transitions from the different POVs jarring at first, but some sweet air-on-bare-skin descriptions. Keep writing...

Very nice story! Looking forward to more from you!!!

I liked your story very much . Being a fan of the great outdoors, UK, not so active these days, it is always a pleasure you never know who you're gonna meet as this story illustrates. I'm a romantic old fool I always hope occasions like this, they'll meet up again sometime, somewhere.

Could you do page breaks or other markers to make the switches from the different POVs more smooth? It is really hard to read this story without them. Thank you.

An excellent first story here. I echo the other comments re creating a break as you change speaker / POV but that's a minor point really.

Thanks for the comments everyone! I did have breaks in the original story, but they didn’t translate into the Literotica version. I’ll try to find a way to re-add them.

Like it! Great first effort and fits nicely into the theme... Well done!

A good story! Felt ready to go on a hike myself.

Promising.

Great story, Ranger.