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by Pleasuretime88

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AnonymousAnonymousover 6 years ago
Rewrite this to fix the bad grammar.

You should rewrite this story. It loses value because of several grammatical errors, plus the fact that the protagonist is turned on his back TWICE IN A ROW, impossible.

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