All Comments on 'First Auntie, Then Mom Ch. 01'

please continue series cant wait for next chapter

Is there going to be part 2

I'm begging here and I'm not ashamed to admit it. Such a great beginning and it just makes you crave the next part.

He needs to fill Holly's and his mom's cunt with his cum

It would have been better if you had decided in what form you were going to write the story.

You started out in past tense the moved to present tense and back again.

Just pick one and stay with it.

The moment I read "set of DDD tits" I was done.

Why do all you dweebs have to describe a woman with a chest that looks like a football dispenser?

Seriously, tone it down a bit.

Love the storyline.

LOL! My only critique? One sign of a prolific writer; reading a paragraph and up pops a name from another story in lieu of the character currently but is fixed with the actual character name in the next breath. More funny than annoying in this case because it was only once.

Do a look up for Jeanie in this story and you'll know what I mean. Still 5 stars.

Thanks for entertaining us.

I think most of the critique, about tense might be true. Your build up and writing make it so hot that to me it is not noticeable. Wonderful Story, going to read part 2 now.

100% HOT so far thanks for the nut

Whoa! Is this a major teaser or what? Whew. Good thing my A/C is working

(11/22/2021) Hey, no complaints about a slow buildup here. The way his chapter is written you could have added three more pages as far as I'm concerned. Very well done. I haven't checked the number of chapters in this series. I hope there are many and perhaps with more than three pages...maybe? 5 stars!

Great buildup, I am going to really enjoy the next part!

Damned hot story. The buildup just makes it hotter.

Great first chapter.... moving on to Chapter 2 with much anticipation.

Lost me at the DDDs

I like a story with build up, much better than the characters just jumping on one another.