by SweetestThing
Another story about him coming back would be good, or some of her adventures round Chicago.
Seems you have a good imagination - so lets go--
Good story, don't usually get into Gramps/granddaughter stuff, but enjoyed this one. A sequel would be nice...
One question though...who the heck is Hank? I quote; ""C'mon Daddy, give me what I need." She cooed seductively. Hank nodded as he ditched his boxers,".
brilliant story love it i for one would love more parts.
out standing writing. you really do have so much tallent for this kind of story. awesome. more please.
I REALLY ENJOYED THIS STORY. I CAN'T WAIT FOR THE NEXT CHAPTER. MOREPLEASE!!!!!!!!
Really enjoyed your story especially from the 3rd chapter on. Had me wet in no time and wishing it was me getting pounded. Please write a sequel when Grandad comes to visit you and you both start fucking again. Can't wait!!!
Mary NZ
I'm going to have to go back and read it again, but I love grandpa's real world saltiness!
and, "Yes!" to a sequel... surely there is more...
Impractical, unlikely, unbelievable, and probably a whole lot of other things. But in spite of that, I loved it!
Great job...but who's Hank? You referred to Vic as Hank one time. I said it before on another of your stories and I'm saying it again on this one...find an editor. You do a fine job but there are some things that just keep coming up.
As people have mentioned, there's a typo in which I refer to Vic as Hank. Hope that clears things up and it doesn't derail your enjoyment too much.
We need to know more about why Nicole's mother is mad at her father? Heck, you could have every woman in Nicole's family fall for Vic?
Yes, yes, a very fine writer with a gift for spinning words.
However, and I never expected to say this, this story really creeped me out. What about it I can't quite say or put my finger on, but... All the shameless whorin'? The age difference? Gramps's crudeness and rather unsympathetic nature? The debasement of it, or her sudden lack of self-respect?
Far from being titillated I, yeah, was pretty creeped out and depressed by the whole experience (which, again, is odd as I like May/December -perhaps not this extreme- and I also enjoy a well-written Incest).
Having read Lacey and Olivia (a rather impressive and pleasant surprise in a genre I don't normally read) I had hopes for this as well, but I can honestly say L & O was a much finer work, one I'd love to see more of, with more sympathetic/endearing characters.
Again, you're talent is not in question, that's undeniable...
I hope you continue posting her on Lit. as you are a very fine writer.
I'm not normally into the incest type of stories, but I love your writing style. I also love your use of words. Please keep writing.
Sequel sounds like a super idea, the sooner the better!!!!!! Loved the story line and can't wait to see where it goes from here!!!!!
Loved the slow build-up. Am currently working on my own story. Published the first part 2 weeks ago. The title is Masurbating My Son. Am working on Chap 2.
Where in Canada are you? I grew up in Vancouver, went to College in Toronto. Now I live near San Francisco.
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Ray
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I hope that you will make a sequel of this story. I would love to see how it goes from here.
i usually am not really into incest or long stories (cause they tend to ddrag on) but this was fucking amazing! i wouldve really like to know what the parents reactions were to all the shit she brought home though, and if you have a sequel, please include a party she throws at her house. thnx for the great story, best thing ive read on this site for months :)
Are the horny, masturbation jockeys on literotica truly the best, or most honest, critics of quality or a job well done (assuming a story's job is to do more than simply provide fodder for masturbation)?
What constitutes a good story? Is it well-written? Does it have good characters? A good story? Or is it simply because whatever fic they're reading got them off, or played to their kinks in a big way?
It's like trying to get an honest opinion or a straight answer out of the guy who just wants to get into your pants; can you trust what they're saying?
Interesting question. To answer it as best as I can, regarding my stories anyway, is that I've never really posted any stories here with the purpose of having them critiqued. Obviously the comment section provides an avenue for that and certain people do focus on whether or not the story is good in a larger sense but for the most part the stories I post here are posted for people to enjoy. People here may not be the "best" critics but they are fair judges as to whether or not they themselves enjoyed it.
If someone posts a comment saying they liked the story it means the same to me as someone posting and saying that they think it's "good" in a critical sense.
LOVED this. Keep up the good work it was so original and well thought out. Thanks for the great read!!
probably shouldnt have read this at work......oh well someone will be happy when i get home....thanks
I have read your lesbian stories, but this one just because. I loved it! Wow, I think I need to read the others now too! More like this one please? Maybe a sequel? ;-)
I hope a sequel is in the works because I know I'd love to read it!
Hell yea a sequel plz! I've read all ur lesbian stories and love them the characters special and this is no different. Truely great I can't wait for the sequel hurry plz! Lol great author what can I say
And entertaining hope to see further adventures of Nic & Vic in the future (smile)
Definitely one of the hottest stories I've read recently. Please write a sequel!
This is an amazing story, and I definitely wanna hear more about Nicole.
definitely need an encore here for this one. A trip to the west coast would be appropriate! Then you might include a side trip to the islands and the assets needed to conduct a vacation on the side for everyone involved.I'd like to see a 3 way with one or more of Vic's gurls from the west coast! Give her a go will you?
my fave author on this site is Shoguy...well endowed older men who love those sexy-hot teens-especially their granddaughters! nice job...but looks like you don't write anymore...tooooo bad dude.this site needs writers like you and shoguy!
Whoa! That was amazingly hot! I fucked myself to three orgasms while reading this little beauty :)
A very good story! I'm not sure what to say else but I enjoyed reading it a lot! :)
One of my favorite incest stories and would love a sequel. Curious to see what happens in the future and also to see what her family says about all the new stuff too.
Yeah, he's crude, but he does get her off. My guess about why her mother doesn't trust him: he did the same with her, but she didn't go for it. Maybe Nicole is really his daughter as well as his granddaughter?
Great work and one of my favorites to reread over and over again. Hope there's a sequel in the future and ever more from this duo simply hot.
This is the second story of yours I read. You didn't disappoint.
Five full fucking pages and it never slowed down, never left me hanging around wishing you'd pick up the pace, or make with the randy bits. The characters were fantastic, the sex was worthy, the plot shit totally worked. I could use more of the dominating fucking, and her talking the reigns away from him by just plain *owning* every second of it, so I'll be watching for sequels in this world.
I can totally imagine 'daddy' taking her in a college auditorium, back stage during a drama perfoance, or some crazy cayman island shit with a private plane or queening some bizzare harem he has stashed at his home pad.
Also like the way you used the word 'filthy' up in that shit. It doesn't work for me often and totally did here.
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A sugardaddy is not someone who is related. A sugardaddy is a, usually, older man who provides financial security to a young woman, in a regular fashion for which he she bestows sexual favors. This usually can include a house or home, a car and some generous walking around money.
OMG! This one well written story! Please continue with a sequel... Please! :)
L
Very well-written. Extremely descriptive. You really write sex well and blend moments of character into your sex scenes. I like the way you describe her state of mind and what she's thinking...it's those details that make it even better.
Keep up the great work!
Now that you've submitted a story up here after a long hiatus. .....it would be fun to.have you continue this story line....please!!!
One of the things I like most about your stories has been your sense of humor. If it was in this story I missed it.
Fantastic. Looking forward to a follow on story. You are an awesome writer.
As usual you've done wonderful work. Please keep going it was fantastic!
I loved it even more!!!!
You are a fantastic author. Thank You
This was fantastic! I do hope you end up writing a sequel (mainly because you are an EXCELLENT writer, but also cause it was a great story)! Thanks!
I have read this so many times!!! The first few chapters are my fav thought. When she first meets her grandpa Vic and he is so manly and crude when she still seems unsure. That build up was perfect and had me dripping! I want more crude grandpa stories, like yesterday!
The best line . . . of this story.
"Italian, so basically, German without the fucking balls"
Thanks, so much...........v
Ok, you have written the Hottest Grandpa story on Lit! Every hot adorable Granddaughter needs a Grandpa like Vic to spoil them rotten! 5 Stars plus! We do hope there is another chapter in the future. Maybe Nichole and a girlfriend or two visit Vic in the Caribbean, spring break is Cumming!
This was incredible. It's a shame you didn’t write more incest stories, as you had a real talent for it.
This was really, really hot and incredibly well written. Unfortunately it looks like you've long since stopped writing for Literotica, which is a real shame.
Great stuff.
I loved this story. I want to hear about when he comes back or she goes to visit. Possible pregnancy?
I enjoyed the way you created Vic as a character and the second half of the story I guess was pretty inevitable. I guess for some, that kind of incest rape fantasy is hot as hades. Flipped my switch off a bit. Guess I would have been happier with Nicole more in charge. Again, your character details and scene setting are great. I'll check other stories, because I feel you could write the sex as imaginatively as you do the rest.
That does need a f**king need a sequel! go for it. starting with what her parents think of their daughter's new things. Hint...Hint?
Such a great story, well written and while I wasn't sure of parts at first it actually worked out well and the quality of your writing is fantastic! I would love a sequel, partly to get her parents reaction to the car and other presents, OMFG, and to see what other crazy shit vic will buy her, maybe that truck for the Chicago winters!!!
Loved the hell out of it!! I’d really like to see a sequel, fill in the backstory. I’m betting her mom and Grandpa had a story, am I right? Lol
You refer to the grandfather as Frank in page 2 and later he's Hank.
An editor would really help.
Over the top, fun, sexy, and — most important — written literately.
Thank you,
T
This is such a good story!!! If only i could meet a grandpa or Daddy like that 😋💞
Re-read this a number...
SO bad/good...!
He's a silver-tongued devil, and WHAT a change in her in 48 hours or so...discovering how pliant her 18-yo body, and mind, can be...industrial-strength vibe indeed!
You certainly hit the nail on head describing your non-lesbian works...
Still a 5+...such a pity not still writing...love your avatar
PS-Alexieeee's comment makes me smile-reminds me of old joke..."would you sleep with me for a $1M-? How about $100?...What do you think I am?...already established that...now just trying to settle on a price...."
Loved, loved, loved this story!!!! Definitely would love a sequel! This has to be one of my favorite stories on here.
Excellent story, well written, great character development. A handful of very minor edits would be worth the effort. One of the best stories on this site. I would certainly be interested in more from these two.
Mom reluctant for Daughter to spend time with estranged Grandad... Tells her to call if anything goes wrong... and He wants to be called Daddy.... Why do I get the feeling Nicole isn't the first family member Vic has had his way with...