All Comments on 'Going Green'

Such a nice story development.

I really enjoyed reading this story. It was romantic and on topic for the theme. I can't wait to read more of your stories. Good luck in the contest.

I really enjoyed the story very much and I gave you 4 stars just so you will give us another segment for the 5th star. I do hope to hear how her parents handled her having a boy friend and hopefully soon to be husband. Please give us more and thank you.

Very well written love story that embraced the concept of this contest. Best of luck!

Great build up; well-written! Has to be one of the best stories that I have read on the site!

The perfect Earth Day story -- it's well written, with three dimensional characters, and it's about something important. Truly, for buildup, romance, and rip-roaring sex, this is as good as it gets on Literotica. You have my vote!

This is another very fine story from you. Your character development is awesome, and it makes the characters very real. That may be why your work is so good -- you allow the reader to experience the events and to really imagine that the story was heppening to them.

I like it, I like it, I like it........

WOW! I loved it! The characters, the plot, the build up and then the finish! Hope to read more!

Oh Gurl;

You sure can write!

Sorry all i can vote is 5 stars....there aren't more.

Wow! I totally adored this story! It was romantic and hot and the characters and relationship were well developed within the tale.

I really enjoyed your writing style and the way you made the characters so likable and real. You are a wonderfully talented author and I wish you the best of luck in the contest because this is a worthy competitor!

this was a fine and refreshing read!

good luck with the competition.

It was great, my only dissapointment was when he suggested a cab. After all the green talk, he should have known that wouldn't be appropriate with Rika.

Liked your characters, the setup, everything. Your hottest by far.

Thank god its not just hungry man and woman who leap on each other at the first chance.

Great read, good buildup. Very genuine story with vulnerabilities, shyness, jealousy, insecurities - all human qualities in the characters. Very credible and I agree that it deserves more than 5 stars. Keep it up.

I realized I hadn't left a comment on this lovely tale. I love how you tied into the theme of the contest, but also told a coherent, patient story of a relationship developing. I liked both of these characters and the way we got to know them. Congrats!

Great story...a very refreshing change to have a well thought out and developed build-up of the characters and their relationship - which is what makes a good story!

I really liked your story, well put together and well paced. Grammar and spelling near perfect, which is not unimportant either. There is, however, one thing that comes back a few times in here that really bothers me: the focus on the eyes and especially the idea that one consciously controls the expression in one's eyes.

I fully agree that the eyes are expressive (and perhaps a "window to the soul"), but you seem to treat the eyes as pretty much the only part of the face that can express emotion. I don't think I want to know how often the eyes were mentioned in this story.

However, it is with sentences like "he tried to inject a look of understanding into his eyes" that you really ruin the mood for me. I am sorry, but this sentence is to me almost a prime example of a writer trying to show romantic sensitivity and failing in a bit of a ridiculous fashion. It's nothing short of humorous how bad that sentence is.

As I said before, I really enjoyed this story and I think that you have written it very well indeed. I look forward to reading your other stories and hope that you continue to keep writing. My only request to you is that you focus less on the eyes of your characters and realise the whole face, as well as body language can show emotion.

Regardless of what the others say, I want you to know that this was an awesome story. I loved how you spent so much time building the relationship before they had sex. A lot of writers just jump to the sex parts, not that there is anything wrong with that, it is just nice to have some backstory with a good foundation.

All of the elements of this story: the description of the characters, the establishment of the plot, the reasoned purpose of every scene, and the urges pushing forward while timidity draws back, were so perfectly parceled out that the scene in the bar was inevitable. Then the business in her condo that finally wound up in the bedroom was beautifully crafted, the physical act of showing him around betraying her final conflict between eagerness and anxiety.

I believe if I were to sum up this story in one word it would be 'impeccable' for your attention to detail.

I consider you one of the most gifted, skillful writers whose works I have read on this site.

to this story. For some reason I thought it was alot longer and wanted to give it the time it deserved. Well I just finished it. You have again amazed me with how descriptive you are. Whether it was talking about being green or the way the relationship revealed itself.

You are an expert in the one thing every good story needs, and that is description. I don't know anyone doing it better! Can't wait to see what you do next.

I have ever read on Literotica. Superb in every way.

A remarkably well written love story! Totally realistic and wonderfully sexy. Thanks for the great read!

I guess the above says it all.

I wish I had found this during your contest time.

A beautiful job!

I just found this story and I loved it. Please write more.

I LOVE this story. Please do an epilogue!

Beautifully written. Great story build-up.

It's not just about lust and sex but other aspects were also beautifully narrated what makes the story amazingg!

This guy totally didn’t deserve this girl.