by Eosphorus
Really enjoyed this as a fun story. I've always liked older women when I was younger.... Well, I still do and the young ones too....
This was a most excellent story. I loved how sensual the foreplay was between Helena and Jonah, it provided a great buildup to the inevitable climax. I'm also glad that there will be more chapters in this series, and that there are also other female characters, like the receptionist and the reporter, who could become involved with Jonah in the future. There's lots of room here for more story and erotic opportunities. Thanks again for writing a great erotic fic :)
It was more or less believable until she said, "Fuck me." A chaste kiss on the cheek I could believe. Women, and especially accomplished mature women, don't jump into sex so soon. It takes time for intimacy to develop. and rightly so. The writing reveals some maturity, but the thinking here is decidedly adolescent.
Really enjoyed this one! A little more character development in Chapter 2 would be nice. He should get her totally at the conclusion of your last chapter. I just love happy endings!
I'm glad you had already decided on further chapters - this one being Chapter 1. Generally the story was believable - enough detail, also well paced. However, the sex was abrupt and unsubtle - I will rephrase, ie. re-spell, that to indicate just how unsubtle I think it was --- definitely unnnnn - subbbbbb - tle. Try saying that - the sound of it conveys the meaning. To counter that how about they continue a relationship, but have her drawing back (like, "what have I done?") for a while, during which time we can have him gaining "hero's rights" from all admiring females around. I like how that sounds - 'hero's rights' - he really deserves it. Thanks for a great story.
Will place this story along with its follow on chapters in my favorites. Will add you to my favorite authors list.
Thanks for the entertainment. :)
He has been worshipping her from a far and could it be Karma, something that was supposed to be or just luck on his part that he was taking a break when his dream woman was attacked and he became the Knight in Shining Armor. Great story so far.
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I enjoyed this. Depicting Helena's strength seems to be beyond some of the other commenters, but it is obvious she is a woman who knows what she wants and how to get it.
THANKS
Older women lovers should read this and hope they could find a generous woman who is elegant enough to be denure and yet willing to be a sex partner with a younger man.