All Comments on 'Homecoming'

Well written and very well thought out.

I wished that Zoe wasn't so badly injured, that she came away from that bomb with at least her limps intact. Personally, I couldn't perform with an amputee (at least one missing an arm and leg), but that's just me.

Loved this story almost as much your other ones. Glad your back and keep up the good work.

Very touching and "real" in the emotional sense. Strong writing skills here. Some typographical and grammatical errors broke the flow a few times, but I happily overlooked those in favor of the magnificent storytelling. Like with your previous story, "A Father's Love", this one definitely got 5 stars from me! Well done and I hope to see more from you in the future!

Definitely worth 5 *s.

Trigurdis, if she had her full compliment of limbs then she would not have needed the amount of help that led to their relationship developing. As for your attitude, or aversion, to amputees wait until you meet one and find him/her extremely attractive, especially their personality. You might find you have no choice then.

I know these stories are only fantasy, but some of them address real world issues and this is one of them.

Sorry to point this out. But your use of laying in the first paragraph is wrong and it bothers me. (OCD maybe?) You could say "and I lay in bed" or "I was lying in bed" but if you say, "I was laying on the bed" what were you laying? An egg? Now that that's out of my head, I will read the rest of your story. It's too bad I'm wasting my one allowed comment on that one thing, but that's life.

I was injured in Afghanistan Nov 20 2010 6 months into my 1st deployment was 20yrs old. I'm a C6 Quadriplegic incomplete I'm paralyzed from the chest down. The injury described here would be some where in the L or lumbar section of the spine.

Love the story.

I would like to thank all service members

i like to read ch.2

So enjoyable, can really imagine this scenario, got me really wet.

Please keep writing stories like this.

Very sweet and well written.

I hope my daughter be the same

Great story - very loving and sexy. Hope there is more.

I really loved reading this the latent eroticism blossoming throughout the story was just fantastic. Hope there will be more!!!

HERE's1st.offHERE's - didn't read entire story did read about3/4about story

bits pieces here there bits pieces here there ........................................ now that's

been said - - - how dare the readers this site don't say : this story gonna almost

immediately become one of thee absolute best stories this site ever had

like ever ............ how dare the readers this site don't say : this story already one

of the saddest stories this site ever had like ever ............ how dare the readers

this site don't say : thee ex_wife\\her mother deserves die because how

cruel remained throughout story ............ how dare the readers this site

don't say : the sons\\the brothers deserve die because how cruel remained

throughout story ............................................. AGAIN NOW - didn't read

entire story did read about3/4about story bits pieces here there

I've been an incomplete paraplegic for 32 years, now. I have a T12 injury. I appreciate your tackling a topic that makes many people uncomfortable.

Nicely done.

To write more. Thanks for a touching, thoughtful story.

Hope to read more chapter about this fantastic couple!!! Wonderful story! 5 stars!

Very moving story. Would have to be the best I have read on this site. Very sensitively handled of a disabled person. Well done and please write more

Truly the ramblings of a madman.

Anyway, I do agree with him on one notion: This is genuinely one of the best stories on this site. Hope you're still writing!

That has to be the best story I have read in a long time. To bad it was just fiction???

Kept me hard from first sentence to the last. Hated to see it end. Lots more they could explore. Keep up the good work. Thanks

The story was truly different and interesting and I enjoyed it, even though the amputation thing really isn't my bag. But throughout there were randomly strewn words, obviously from previous edits and at least one instance where an entire passage was garbled.

"he wasn't sure how much of either could be saved. While they were amazed that was there wasn't more internal The blast had severely damaged her right arm and leg, and damage, there appeared to be some minor damage to her spine. She was still in surgery; the 2nd shift of surgeons had taken over."

The above text is an entire paragraph taken from low down on page 1, as you can see it's missing the beginning of the 1st sentence, maybe more. The end of the 2nd sentence seems to be missing. The 3rd sentence seems to have "and damage," randomly inserted for no apparent reason, making it seem like it's not been read through.

I think with the editing sorted out and bit more care given before posting/publishing this would be a better story. Not because the story lacked anything but because the reader would be more engrossed and less worrying about the errors that are noticed.

Yes, I've also noticed that there's a fair amount of sloppy errors in the story,

I've sent feedback to the author where I pointed some of them out, so hopefully he will edit the story.

That was a very beautiful story of love.

This is one of the best erotic stories I've ever read, and that's truly saying something!

Congratulations!

Woah...tough read..

The severity of the injuries made it really hard for me to keep reading at first. (Picturing how severly she was injured and amputated, really fucked me up for a while)

In the back of my head I thought "how can this get remotely erotic?"

In the end it was just a really sweet loving, love story between a dad and daughter. Incest, injuries, erotica aside.

Very great unique story

But you didn't have to keep making statements that she probably fucked every guy in her division. Ok she was no virgin but with all those hints you made her sound like a whore and it took away from her as a character and that the dad only got her was because if her injuries making both of them seem like pity fucks.

What a beautiful, sensual story. Fulfilling the needs of two people in love, a father's love for his daughter to do whatever it takes, and written in a way that changes all boundaries. Thet eroticism is bound into the story so well, a moving and erotic read.

A bit too much body damage for me to find it all that arousing, I would have enjoyed it more if i was only spine damage that left her weakened to the point of needing help with everything, and needing a long time to build up her strength.

Don't want to read mentions about her being with other guys either.

That said it was still decent enough that I would like to see it continued, I would just like it more if it was edited to fix those two things.

This is a beautful story, after all the tragedy, how two lonely and broken people find love in the adversity, or better said, how they can finally express it for each other. I'd really love to see a sequel to this, to know how Zoe heals and improves, and if she's able to use some type of orthopedics to be more independent and free to move. But also, to know what happens to them in their future, their plans and how they will deal with friends and family...

unknown to us writers...

Great story line, but way to many grammatical errors.

Good story. I quite enjoyed it. To the commenter who noted grammatical errors, "grammer" is spelled "grammar." Just sayin'.

Well done!

Very enjoyable.

Bill

A sacred story about a sacred relationship as well as a sacred experience. I was humbled as I read.

Wow, did you need an editor.

That said, excellent, deep, emotional, erotic story or two people finding the center of each other across the gap of a taboo.

Five for you, barely, because of poor editing.

I gave this *story* a five, because it is excellent. I have to say, however, that the editing and proofreading seemed nonexistent, and the research... Well let's just note that Marine basic training is at Parris Island, not Paris, and that the Civil Air patrol is a civilian group that does volunteer search and rescue in their own privately-owned civilian aircraft.

I can guarantee that no KC-135 - a Boeing 707 used for mid-air refueling - has ever been flown by the Civil Air Patrol.

Having no personal knowledge of a subject is eminently forgivable. Not so failure to do necessary research and basic checking of grammar syntaxe, and spelling.

Good Job, thanks for sharing your work.

I don't know what all the hub bub is all about. I believe you adequately prefaced the story explaining your lack of knowledge of the intricacies of the medical and military aspects contained therein.

Unfortunately, they'll always be some know-it-all who has to 'show-off' and demean a story by pointing out those certain aspects that were spot on, specification wise.

It is my belief that the basic outline of your offering was to set up a plausible intimate father-daughter incest scenario. Your story displayed a long relationship of a loving father and daughter that later evolved into one that was incestuous. It was apparent that the daughter had to slowly seduce her father to get him accept the relationship she had longed for.

The ending was perfect, in that it appeared that this had become a mutually rewarding father and daughter with benefits relationship, destined to endure the hardship they would face down the road. Bravo!

"Homecoming:" - This story grabs me by my soul and emotions. Being a Viet Nam and Cuban Missile Crisis era Navy veteran I have empathy for every lost and physically damaged veteran--American Patriots all.

The story theme is fabulous and well considered. However, as several readers have commented there are issues that were not researched very well, that could have added value to the story concepts and acceptance. With a father and his daughter caring so much for each other--beyond the military physical damage of daughter Zoe--the story fell short of an emotional attachment of Zoe and her father. As dedicated to each other they claim to be, there is no foresight of what there future will entail nor consist of in the way of family/children. With some careful editing the story could have been better presented, and greater acceptance by many more readers.

"Kathy just made a disgusted sound, rolled over and went to bed." Umm... she was already in bed. Sleep?

"...or do something production." productive?

And on and on and on. Became too tiresome to keep going. If you can't be bothered caring about your readers, don't write!

A 26 year vet

Great story premise but just hope it isn't going to turn out to just be about some amputee fetish - As relates to the given bath situation I can't believe he had the mental wherewithal to actually get aroused - Needs a bit of proofreading. Several mentions of 'legs' which should have been the singular 'leg'. Semper fi, Mack . . . .