All Comments on 'Hotel Threesome'

You begin telling a story, then telling the story as if you are talking to your couple, then continue to go back and forth - no consistency, makes for a confusing story. Also grammer isn't too great. "Steve like them as well".; ""Yeah, it's quite cool to read about how other men sees my wife"; etc. More proof reading required.

Content might be ok but I couldn't finish reading because of the above. YES, I am anal!! Sorry!