All Comments on 'I Want a Divorce'

Good beginning! Needs a follow up.

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Please write a second chapter. This is just unfinished.

More, for another 5

There a story in here somewhere?

Seems like the story was dropped in a hurry. But generally I think the length of a story should be determined by how much the author has to say. Leaving it up to the audience feels a bit like design by committee. Makes sense for commercial products, not so much for pure creative work.

You need to write another chapter. Their relationship could go many different ways. Pick one; it's your story. But this one ended prematurely. I won't rate it.

Don't bother with a part 2, this was a weak story to start with.

2nd chapter would be nice

It's got legs.Let it run !!

This is not close to your usual level. It was dull and limped along to a sad and abrupt conclusion. April and her husband do reflect the often tragic results of teenage marriages and that got this to a 3.

Counseling might have helped.

Chapter 2 please!

I don’t know about a second chapter. Maybe leave it as is like a JPB story. He never finishes his. Thanks for sharing

I always enjoy your stories. This one could be complete, as another commenter wrote “like JPB.” However you’ve left some loose plot lines between two characters that are deeply flawed and left in limbo. I would be happy to see a part 2. Thanks for writing great tales!

I would like to see a second chapter. It's good to see you back writing.

I agree with others. The story is not finished so I would appreciate a second part.

Yes. It needs another chapter.

Interesting, but short and left it hanging. A second chapter may help give closure.

Disappointing. The ending is fine. It could be expanded on but, we get the gist.

It's the rest of the story that feels hollow and underdeveloped.

Moreso than an epilogue following the results of the divorce I'm left feeling like we need to hear April's side of the story.

I think that's what makes me feel hollow about this story. It's a monologue. We hear one side of the story but, there's no meaningful interaction between the husband and wife over the course of a 20 something year long marriage.

Definitely needs a second chapter to tie out the loose ends.

I love your writing and would really appreciate a second chapter, it's got me really intrigued thank you

Darren

Really needs another chapter, has great potential but just feels massively rushed especially towards the last third.

As always great story DG. I read everything you have submitted on lit.

Hopefully there is a part 2.

I've missed your stories, Good read

A second chapter would be nice.

Another chapter

"...it depends on what you have to say..."

It's an incomplete story. You've written enough stories to know that.

I guess this means you will be doing a second chapter. Everyone wants one and you are a great writer to do it.

A second chapter for this story is a must, otherwise what's the point?

Another chapter.

Chapter 2, please. I'd love to see how this turns out.

This really needs a chapter 2. Her jealousy destroyed their marriage, and only after many years when she crosses the line does she think it is forgivable. Its going to be very interesting as they are in their mid 40's. Plenty of time to find someone new. April may now enjoy sex, but she will find out that the rest of the relationship will be missing and she threw her marriage away. I think she is in a for a lifetime of regret.

A follow on would be great

Hope its fiction.

If she’s as sexy as he found her then it’s highly likely it’s not the first time, considering she’s had minimal sex with him for 12 years.

Then again he did the same so he’s a bit of a nonce.

Could have a chapter about recriminations

I felt an undertone, that she really didn’t love him. She just accepted the situation after she got pregnant. To go from low sex life to taking on two men is a little extreme though. Definitely wondering what could happen after this ending.

YOU USUALLY DO MUCH BETTER.

Yeah…kind of need a second chapter.

u should have skipped through that marriage a bit more and then turn it into a romance. u do well in romance. hard to feel anything for ppl who choose to torture themselves. when there was no effort to reconnect from either party after the kids moved out. makes me wonder why they didnt at least separate. unfortunately this happens irl actually feels more real than most. and im sorry but there had to be some kind of love or something or they wouldnt have stayed together after the kids left for those who think it was just a meal ticket thing

I generally dislike divorce or bitter cheating stories. I don't find them arousing and I come to this site to get turned on. Find the growing volume of BTB and RAAC stories disturbing.

I read this because I was curious about the title, it was a shorter story and I was hoping it would be a quick tale where a cheating spouse got justice served by a strong spouse standing up for themselves.

Lately I've read some hard cuckold that were not advertised or tagged leaving me feeling ambushed and rattled. Sadly many of these stories are by high quality writers that keep you interested, even if the story is tragic. So I was in need of an antidote story to exercise some demons out of my system.

This story was ok because it didn't go too hard down the cheating and humiliation storyline like others. Even with the unsavory plot, I would have liked a little more follow up so I vote for a sequel.

It doesn't have to be long as we really only need to wrap up to a more complete conclusion and answer some questions like:

1. was that truly the first time April cheated?

2. did April stop having sex after Jerry left the hotel room?

3. why did April have no interest in sex during their marriage and suddenly have a threesome?

4. did April regret not trying to move past Jerry's supposed infidelity prior to his actual infidelity?

5. why did Jerry not try talking to her more over the marriage (pre and post actual one-night-stand) and why no counselling?

6. how can April stubbornly cling to anger and mistrust and then do the very act that had hurt her? If it was for revenge, why wait the duration of their marriage to do it?

7. did April and Jerry realize how they wasted their lives being bitter, sad and practical just for more time with the children? do they not realize children learn by watching and their cold marriage would have been a terrible lesson on love and intimacy?

8. did April and Jerry reconcile or divorce. if divorce, what did they tell the children? how did they tell them (together or not) and did it affect either of their relationships with the children?

9. If they divorced, what is next for them individually? You could get into long-term but that could get into harder cuckold territory or fantastical stories of "never got along better" which would make the entire divorce story a lot more tragic. as in, their marriage together was a gigantic waste of time being bitter and celibate when they could have had an active life together or separate.

I think it needs a closing chapter. I agree with rruymann. You usually do better but this one was still OK.

I agree an undertone was throughout the story ---- she blamed him for the 2nd & 3rd kid. She cut-him-off over suspicion pushing him into becoming a one time guilt ridden cheat (that he fessed up too).

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She objected and further penalized him over his masturbating to quell his urges - KEEPING him HOME.

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Yup, he waited for her to get over playing her games to only be slapped down again. It's time to regain his man-card, sexual life, and a real life. Time to dump her double standard cheating ass. Many will say what took him so long but I know and can relate - we 'hope' for a change to only be disappointed.

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Obvious she hasn't trusted or wanted him in +12yrs. Time to cut-bait and make a new life. Besides is he really sure the other girls card-nights out she wasn't getting banged - her trust is now shit but after 12yrs does she really care.

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5*****, Hooyah, Salutes.... 2nd part is not really needed.

Pathetic offering from a writer who o considered talented… worse then what I normally expect from JPB!

Don’t bother with any more chapters…

Holy crap monkies you sure put a lot into a little. Of course it's unfinished and needs another chapter, but you might want to consider something a little more expansive. The devil is in the details.

Let me see if I understand this correctly. The husband's friends jokingly said that the husband had sex with some woman. When the wife took it seriously they told the wife that they were just joking but she never accepted that which resulted in the destruction of their sex life for the next 15 years?

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A wife in her twenties and thirties is only having sex with her husband once every 4 months... And the husband decides not to talk about this sexual incompatibility for the next 10 orc15 years.?

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Wow. The husband is a loser AND a retard.

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Waiting for second chapter

One other point. There is no place for the story to go.

Think about it.

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First the wife didn't come home until the next day! How could you possibly justify THAT?...

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"Well you had sex with that one woman because I was a fucking crazy ass bitch that cut you off sexually for months for no reason..."

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2 . Let's assume that this is the very first time that the wife is actually done this. So what?

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A woman in her 20s and 30s who has a reasonably attractive healthy husband at home but decides to have sex with him three or four times a year for the next 10 or 15 years.....

1. Clearly does not love her husband.

2. Even worse.... Has developed some kind of sexual issue.

Don't add a sequel. I'm sure this a RAAC CUCK story

Why is it ok for him to cheat but not her?

Two wrongs don’t make a right but he was in the wrong first.

They have been "married" for 25 years, and they both remain too immature to be in an intimate relationship. Continuing the story would be a formidable undertaking. It would take several more chapters at this point to produce a realistic resolution of this clusterf**k.

Well you did have a story in there somewhere; only the writing was so stilted it was hard to get any emotional attachment to the mc or the storyteller. I am positive you have the ability to write way smoother than this offering.

Go for it, great to read something of yours after so long...

You Lost your mojo Dg hear ? Not even a 2 pages story and you write a chapter 2 if we want ? Really ?

I didn't think you were this kind of authors... If you doesnt really want to write anymore just stop

Part two no weird cliffhangers

'Second chapter is a bad idea, it could only end in a RAAC situation. Besides, truer words were never spoken, “You couldn’t forgive me just like I can’t forgive you”

A classic example of getting married way to early. Both were too immature at the time. IMO leave it here, it's best they divorce and move on.

The tell is just a recitation of events, no emotional depth or insights so it ultimately comes off as flat. Not one of your best, hoping a follow up dives deeper.

Well you have a teaser for a story. In my opinion Jerry should have toldl April about his tryst with Sarah. That would have been less intrusive than coming from Sarah's husband and getting propositioned by him. Jerry could still have reminded April that SHE told him this was how he was expected to deal with his 'needs' as April would not be performing her wifely duties anymore. Put the monkey on her back. Also Jerry should have been shown as making a concerted effort towards reconciling with April during those 12 years of sleeping apart. This would have made April's adultery more onerous and exposed her hypocrisy to everyone who knew them. Then there should have been a more fleshed out aftermath were Jerry bullet points and hi-lites his list of grievances with April. They have both screwed up, and Jerry has had 12 years to do a lot of maturing. Is it over? Can they reconcile? Will Jerry BTB?

Sadly it read more like a school report, it seemed to be delivered in a monotonous drone with absolutely zero emotion.

Why post an UNFINISHED story, only going to finish it if readers want it? It YOUR story! Finish it or don't but don't post unfinished stories!

It needs a second chapter, there's a lot unresolved

Dislikable characters. About the premise: "Will my mistakes condemn to a lonely life"

it's interesting the conclusion of another recent tale:

"Divorce is Okay, Breaking up is Okay, Being alone is Okay, What is not Okay is staying somewhere you're not valued and appreciated" (CindyTV)

So, we'll see how this plot is going to develop: an unbelievable RAAC, an inevitable divorce or some karma events for both ?

It’s nice to see a Loving Wives story where the husband isn’t a perfect paragon and the universe doesn’t magically bend in his favor, but I’m not sure this one is worth continuing.

Vapid story. Not up to your usual standards. I would suggest you move on to your next good story and forget

about a subsequent chapter two.

Waiting for the 2nd chapter.

not up to your usual very high standards,you will have to write a follow up with a really unusual storyline to make up for a bland start ,

A story about a couple of childish immature idiots. With their behaviours they were asking for the destruction of their marriage, family and life. Better a divorce, than to keep living that way. The big problem in this situations is always about the innocent children, that would pay for the stupid mistakes of their parents.

Long beginning about struggling and whatnot that didn't really seem relevant for last part of the story (the actual drama that is kept the reader interested). I like your previous work better. This doesn't seem complete or overly well developed.

If thats it please stop writing

Looking forward to a second chapter. Good story so far

You are usually much better than this.

Nice story, definitely needs a second chapter. There is little doubt in my mind that this was the first time she screwed around. You don't have sex with two guys the first time you have an affair.

The story could stand, as is, letting things drop off the edge of the cliff...but then you'd be missing so many possibilities to actually complete it.

Question is, what do you think, as the author? Is the story finished?

Please write another chapter. She was a cruel bitch ro her husband and didn't take care of his needs. She was getting it on with 2 guys. It's a wonder her husband didn't bat all 3 senseless. Too bad he wouldn't take her on a hike, and she falls off the mountain...Accidentally, of coutse!

Stupidly incomplete.

The story needs an ending.

It seems implausible that her first extramarital experience in at least 25 years (children grew up and went off to college) is with multiple partners. Definitely write another chapter - or more.

JPB never finishing his stories is actually a problem, idk why the hell would you guys encourage that, ever.

There’s more to the story. Write a second chapter.

371 stories and you haven't learned a damn thing. You should have stayed away. What you've offered of late is far below your previous works.

Loved it, thanks for writing it.

I think you could give it another chapter there is room for more from these characters!

Thanks again.

Bill

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Doesn't ring true. He could have stopped it but didn't. Anyway, one star for not finishing it.

Not one of your better stories.

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Barely a page, and almost half dedicated to back story.

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Write more if YOU'RE inspired, not if readers are interested.

Nah, don't bother writing a second chapter. There's nothing there...

Where is the BTB after 12 years suffering with the prude cunt. You have him all sorts of bitch up and leave like a leaf in the wild? You are better then that

Great story. Hoping for a 2nd chapter.

I hope you will continue the story. These two people really fucked their lives up but there is a semblance of hope in there somewhere.

Good read and it would be interesting to read a 2nd chapter.

Another chapter to complete story would be great. Enjoying story so far. 4 **** for incomplete.

Needs a second chapter, this doesn’t feel like it really was more than a cliff notes version of one of your other stories. We need to see the aftermath, how the kids react, etc.

Nah, dont bother....

This whole story is like the subplot to "Chips":

"Well, Jon, if you haven't been fucking your wife in over a year, then somebody else has. It's not even a question of "if," it's a question of "who. Who's been fucking your wife?"

A roommate can be friendly and living but without intimacy there is no true love. He should have walked out the door permanently when she cut him off.

Mmmm so I can see her taking on one guy now and then as a revenge but her doing two at once? Doesn't fit her character at all. Should have just had her cheating with one guy now and then on the GNO. More believable.

Good story, pretty sad….. would like more detail at the end. Just seemed to end to abruptly. Thanks for writing!

Mechanical, no emotion, not a lot of effort put into this one. Like 'miket' said- seems "undeveloped". Not up to this writer's usual standards. A second chapter would be nice, but put more thought into it, please.

What’s she gonna due when she finds out she is pregnant. Her husband had the snip but I’ll bet the scumbags didn’t.

Please finish - I want a divorce

Wow, you used to be a good writer, what happened? How long did it take you to write this, 2 minutes? That's for the effort. (I'm being sarcastic, of course)

Not up to your usual standards. Just did not entertain.

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