All Comments on 'I'll Show You Mine If... Ch. 08'

Even though the sex is fantastic, I think a deep rooted love is what is going to keep them together. The only time they feel whole is when they are together. That's what I would like to read.Thanks ...............Rich

and lots of room for more chapters!!! :D

Man you are a good writer!

Please keep em cumming!!!( pun intended)

This series is absolutely fantastic... you are an excellent writer... I can't wait to read more... I also hope that they find true love with one another and it's not just sex... I see a great relationship here with the two of them.

MAKE MORE, Such a good writer

The storyline is awesome, and you are a freaking amazing writer! keep the story going, i see much more room for future chapters here. and this story deserves it!

he is so stupid this love will not last he has proven he really doesn't love her so many times if he loved her he would have left the party as soon as he saw the other cheerleaders and he would not have gone to her room after he wouldn't have hid in the closet when she had michell over and wouldn't have let diane into his room that really proved he didn't love kris they way he was feeling when diane showed up he would have found a way to stay home from the trip and when the others came home he would sit them down and tell them he found a college on the other side of the country and wanted to go there instead of going with his sister try to keep your stories within the boundries of human nature please

I just re-read this whole series and loved it just as much as the first time. There is sooooo much potential for continuance here though. Wish Susan. and Mom and Dad? I hope you might just get back into more chapters for this one. Thanks MF.

i also re read this series again and enjoyed many amazing orgasms! please do continue to excite with this series

This whole series was excellent! You're a wonderful writer. Please keep writing!

this is for the negative fuck that keeps on talking about human nature as though there were a standard that all humans are based on. every human has different experiences that make them who they are so what someone would do in this situation may go completely against every moral you live your life by. we are talking about teens here. teens which are the most complicated creatures on earth. what they think is sane one day they find to be ludicis the next. most are emotionaly and hormonaly unstable making thier actions unpredictable. now all that being said this story is a work of fiction so there is bound to be copious amounts of bullshit involved in the plot expecially with erotiica because it is inspired by fantasies that begin forming when people are going through puberty. they consistantly change with experiences as people get older but there is still a certain amount of fantacy that can not be controled .fantasy has no rules and is therefore not bound by human nature or any nature really. fantasies are created out of insicurities and hopes and fears and lusts and every other aspect of an individuals humanity .they come from the deepest parts of ourselves where the rules dont aply they come from the place that makes science fiction and horror i agree that many things in this story were rushed but i think that ron abandoning his sister and cutting off all of thier planns that they made when they were siblings and friends would be an act that displayed a lack of love. if he loved her he would accept what he couldnt change but continue take it slow and see what happened .as for the fact that he went to a party and lusted after girls hes a fucking teenager. she was at the party with her boyfriend and regularly having orgies with her friends knowing her brother wanted her. one has to wonder what kind of crazy shit would she have done that night if he hadnt come to that party and sparked some jelousy in her . she might have fucked her boyfriend which wouldnt have been a big leap for her since she wasnt a virgin and was regularly fucking her cheerleader freinds so whats a bit of dick to sooth her frustrations with her brother to take her anger out on .now about the orgies that he atended with his siters friends the kid had seen little of actual women he had felt some in the dark and seen a lot of porn and all of the sudden naked flesh is flying at him at unpresidented rates a person changes when thier aroused they move and talk and act differently and sometimes dont think so clearly so if chivilry is a persons nature even in the fogs of lust maybe they would want to stop themselves from having a bunch of incredibly aroused women all over them but they would still want to and no woman is going to want a man that doesnt find women attractive they do however want men to suddenly become asexual around all people but them even encourageing them to lie to them when they ask"do you think that girl has a nioce ass "the honest man would say fuck yeh the man who wishes to striip himself of who he is and become a walking recording of some human his girlfirend has created in her head based on what she expects of her perfect chivilrous shell of a man would say "no i am blinded by your beuty and can se no other through the bright glare "so yyou want to talk about realistic the fucking girl told him shed be fucking machele in the family room and to figure something out she wanted him there and then freaked out because she betrayed his trust by telling a girl he was a virgin so who fucked over who there and about him fucking his ex girlfriend, kris had a boyfriend all throughout the story and although she wasnt fucking him at that moment all is fair in love and war if his ex wouldnt hve come over kriss would have been fucking her friends while ron sat up stairs alone staring through his computer monitor eating cheetos and wondering later why his cock was covered in orange dusk because he didnt remember jerking off sodeep was his depression . he would have been with his ex if she wouldnt have left .what was he supposed to say "sorry i cant fuck you because im holding out for my stepsister "or should he have hurt the girls feelings a girl he had feelings for both physical and emotional shoud he say "sorry you just dont do it for me any more "or should he just down right lie to her and tell her he has a girlfriend well the options dont look to promising and hes a virgin and has been in his opinion for far too long so he thinks to himself "hey maybe i just need to get this out of my system and it will make me see this shit between me and my sister a bit more clearly who the fuk knows or maybe he still loves this girl the idea that there is just one person that a person was meant to be with is bullshit but who the fuck knows . but maybe your right maybe he should have run away from all of the uncertanties and denied himself the pleasures that the woman he loved was trying to experience just not to the degree he wanted maybe that would have made it all better so that years down the line when they were both married and they could no longer control thier lusts they would finaly give in and ruin eachothers marriges i say they get it all out of thier systems before it can build to such an intensity. and that means that people get hurt on both sides love doesnt always feels good sometimes it takes feeling pain to make one think.in fact that is why depression and sadness and jelousy suck so badly because they make you think deeply and brood but you gain wisdom from such thinking so in the end through the storm that is thier exploration of love they live and learn perhaps they are disapointed and find that it was a passing phase and once again become friends but perhaps they are not disapointed and find that they truely love one another but i know that regret could eat at them eiuther way. regret that they fallow through or regret that they burry thier desires without exploring them so either way thier fucked one regret passes and soon becomes a memory of a fun time they had in highschool when two adults concentualy explored each other the other regret remains because it enspires them to wonder and thier wonder spurs thier thirst for one another and they become each others fantasies and later in life they know they will never be as happy as they would have been had they taken the chance and succeeded or at least gotten it out of thier system .

This story was great, you,ve got to keep writing it. A great story like this a hard to come by. You put just enough foreplay, naughtiness, love, and dialogue that makes it a great story. Your a very good writer, keep it up.

Stop, 5*****x8! Seems like there could b more in the future, going to college maybe?

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Could not stop...had to read them ALL..all the way through...wish there would be more!!!!!

I love this

one of my Best reads,

please add more,,,, it can't end here....

please .... please... Continue

..................................whaaaa?????

keep going it was really getting good, you can't end it like that.

this needs a total rewrite as is it should have ended with chapter one, two at the most. neither of them really loves the other she constantly proved it and he proved it by allowing the former friend into his room. as said by one other reader he should have stayed home from the trip and found another college to go to. if he and you were smart he would have been avoiding and ignoring her from the start of chapter two. this was a total waste of time.

After all that happened, you have to continue the story. Kris has to break up with Tom, Robbie has to go out with Diane or Kris offical, even though in truth he will be going out with Kris and all her friends, and Kris and Robbie has to have a foursome with their parents.

Best story on this whole site! Read it start to finish in one sitting!!!! Nice work

Just proves if a story. Is well written it can build a situation steadily and hold an audience.

Please tell me there is more coming? I know it's been a while, I am just excited to see them have fun with the mom. Is Many Feathers still writing, or is he done.

Was hoping it was going to remain the two of them and turn out to be a loving story that survived between them and no one else.

After all the long, slow (and sexy) buildup and then the consummation of their love, it was really disappointing to see them going back to lesbian and other mixed sex. If he truly "loves" her, it's a kind of love with too many kinks in it to endure---Sooner or later, they'll end up in a swingers' club and divorce in a swirl of alcoholism and depression. Both of them don't love with a sacrificial love; the kind of "love" they have at the moment is just a mutual horniness wearing the guise of toleration. Until the end of chapter 8, this was one of the best stories on LitE, but all of a sudden it just feels, well, sick.

I agree with the anon comment below. The build up to the relationship between Kris and Robbie was really good but the story, for me, was spoiled by the ending. I had expected them to be exclusive with each other especially with Kris having spent so much of the story fighting her feelings for Robbie.

It turned a story of sibling love into a story just about sex.

I don't really agree or disagree with Thedayafter. One thing though, either a continuation of or a sequel to this series would be nice. Maybe Michelle could be included. Also, is Kris on the pill or not?

God this has been so hot. I need more!!!!!!

Wish it was longer. Would love to see how they end up... Do they stay together? Do they go to collage together? Do their exes complicate things? How does Dad react when he find out? How does Dad find out? Do they continue to include friends? I could see this being 20 or 30 chapters if you really wanted it to, And I know I'd love to read everyone. THANK YOU.

What the hell you can't just leave it like that

2 years of waiting…..

Great story. I would like to see it continue having Kris and Robbie go to college together. then it would be nice to see them get married and have children. Overall it is a great story. Thanks.

why all the whining about group sex in a incest story, blows my mind

fucking awesome ending

I am not "disappointed", necessarily, by the ending...just think there could be more to it than that...

I am going to look at author's other stories...'maybe' find something there that goes with Kris & Rob's story...

Five Stars.....🌠🌠🌠🌠🌠

Excellent reminds me of my youth playing that game, "I'll show you mine..."