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Very good for a first effort. You might want to work on making the sex scenes longer and more descriptive. Also more realistic- i.e. 4 ejaculations in just a few minutes. But keep writing!

keep writing stories or your master will be displeased!

He's 10" long when he's soft and 10" when he's hard and he's 4" thick. My god he's the elephant man.

He cums 4 times in 5 minutes, he sounds like he has a loose canon.

I know its fiction but good god, please try have some reality to your story, it stinks.

It was horribly written with those long unnecessary exclamation.

Sorry I couldn't do a minus grade

You did a very good job for your first time. I hope these comments are helpful.

1. Make the story a little more realistic but it doesn't have to be totally (ex. the man cums to many times in a short time)

2. Give a little more detail about the sex and feelings (ex. she is starting to feel good or getting close to cumming but what is giving her that feeling is it his dick rubbing against her cervix or maybe he is rubbing against her clit as he strokes into her)

Just be a little more descriptive about the details.

Still, I think you did good for your first time.

Made me come hard, please keep writing

I agree that you just ned to keep it a little more realistic. Very well done otherwise, the characters and idea was at least real. Ignore some of the aggressive criticism but try to take the constructive stuff on board.

But you have a long way to go.

Let's see how your next one shapes up.

All the best.

Thanks for your superb writing, Keannalee - I've added you to my favourites and look forward to reading more in the future.

the word's 'gaandu' . Its used as an abuse