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AnonymousAnonymousover 15 years ago
Waste Of A Good Read

The title says it all.

oldwayneoldwayneover 15 years ago
It Wasn't Great....But

I think you have it in you to tell a good tale. Don't get discouraged. Do keep writing!

XoltolXoltolover 15 years ago
is it wrong??

that this story totally excites me!!

AnonymousAnonymousover 15 years ago
Poor execution

Nice premise but poor execution. A lot of grammar mistakes and the dialogue didn't fit the scene. Try an editor because you do have promise.

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