by msssubrina
It's good to see a couple finally talking to each other. As long as you both enjoy what you are doing go for it. Thanks again for a well written and sexy story.
Lovely to read a realistic story of a new level of love uncovered. It's a bit brief and it's not perfect, but you will get better as you explore your feelings and put them into words. A fine first piece. Well done.
It is REALLY hard to read huge clusterfucks of words - you need to seperate your paragraphs better, they wreck an otherwise decent story.