All Comments on 'Life Under the Sea Ch. 01'

I thought it was a good start. I don't see why she didn't tell anyone that she used to be human. You would think that they have seen it before. I hope to read more from you soon.

Very nice start. I hope to see you continue it.

i love this story and cant wait for ch. 2.

seriously.. i love it.. i want more.... hell i'll even edit it for you.... but please you cant leave me hanging.....im totally into the fairytale creatures lol.....please write more soon....

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Really good theme, and characters!!! Cant wait to read more!

I love the setting and the sex scenes, although I was a little bothered by Jesse's personality. Much like with Ariel, I found it majorly impulsive for Jesse to decide to permanently become a mermaid in spite of her family and friends and in spite of knowing next to nothing about merpeople and how they live. Also, trying to conceal that she had been a human seems futile from the start so I don't know why she tried. I guess that can be part of the appeal though if she likes taking risks.

Only read your first paragraph, and tbh that was all it took. Really, his manhood is on the outside unprotected??? If they would be existent a mermans parts would be internal with an opening to allow copulation like other sea creatures......

Know it is only a story sorry, but you need to be realistic with these things. All depictions of mermaids show fish skin to the waist or hips and human above.