All Comments on 'Maid's Sister Gave Pleasure'

Very choppy and inconsistent. I’m sorry but I couldn’t go beyond the first page

3*

Tc

He, she, him, her ? Who is who?

VERY DIFFICULT TO FOLLOW !

Perhaps you need a time line, then script around and along said line.

An editor familiar with Americano English would

help tremendously.

Must have list a lot in translation