All Comments on 'Mistress Sicily Ch. 01 - Taking Francine'

I think you have a good story here but I am finding it difficult to read. Having two characters whose names both are 3 letters and which both start with R is a writing mistake. I have to keep going back to the start to remind myself who Ron is and who Ray is / which one is which woman's husband. Also having a character named Sicily who is then referred to by as Sis has me thinking, ever time I read Sis, that it is referring to another character's sister. I mean this to be constructive criticism as, creatively, you are a good writer but these technicals just make the story, IMPO, difficult to read and enjoy. Please do not take this negatively. I just wanted to enjoy this more but in the end I gave up reading it.