All Comments on 'Morris / The Dangerous Jade Pt. 01'

Sorry, i got so tired of the massive complaining in the start that i didnt care about your protagonist

Interesting start. Not sure where this is going, but will definitely keep reading to find out. Lots of possibilities.

I’m interested to see where this goes

Fascinating, different from your usual, very much looking forward to where this goes.

Character building is excellent, well delineated with an economical use of prose, I'm interested in all of them. Hope Stepbitch makes a reappearance.

And what did Liz inject Red with?

Whenever you think your life sucks, it is stories like this that help to put things in perspective. I thought it was bad when I lost my job but at least I am not being sucked to death by a home engineered cow milker with the extra Viagra injector option but then you never know what tomorrow will bring. I have to read more of this. Very entertaining with some great twists and turns.

Really, Morris Micklewhite?

Why not Maurice Joseph Micklewhite Jr.? A.K.A Sir Michael Caine CBE. Your reference to the East End of London works. Were you referencing the Kray Twins? Though they were not assassinated.

A little slow, but glad I persevered. Now you’ve got e hoping you don’t take too long to give up parts 2,3,4,…

5* anyway. Great cliffhanger.

Tc

You've never been to the Keys because there are no Basements. They'd be underwater. Other than that, good start.

I took this entire first chapter as a great, big hook. And all the complaining? Hey, I used to be a teenager, too. Plus, this poor schmuck had a lot to complain about. Good job. Write on, MacDuff!