All Comments on 'My Sister Jackie Ch. 02'

I don't think I can wait another couple years for the next chapter, please continue quickly. A great story.

That was fantastic. You got all the right emotions. Their both feeling that it is right with the world. That makes the story very hot. Keep up the good writting. Hopefully you could do it sooner. I be looking forward to it.

I'm glad you continued this story. It left a very visual picture in my mind.

I hope you write more.

Thanks,

SM

After reading both chapters of this story, I couldn't help but think that the two fo them just need to move in together and continue to live their lives like any other couple would do.

And the sex was just fantastic!!

Love is all that counts. Great story and written from the heart. They should be together like any other couple and be happy. He needs to marry his sister and she will be the wife he needs and he the husband she wants.

Despite the occasional second thoughts on his part, I think they are both on the same wavelength and they are both serious about pleasuring each other in mutually agreeable and loving ways. A tale well told. Ronnie W.

Keep 'em cumming! Excellent read. Great action and wonderful visual descriptions!

First, let me say that I absolutely love the way you're getting into the protagonist's head. The dialogue is perfect, the scenes are well-described, the "action" is realistic and I am left with the feeling that I am actually experiencing this whole situation WITH them as opposed to just feeling like a fly on the wall. You get top marks for ALL of this.

The ONLY critique I would offer is on the editing. There's a few typos, grammatical errors and punctuation errors which conspire to throw off the reader's attention.

A story this good should be *pristine*. It deserves nothing less than perfection. PLEASE try and focus on the technical aspects of the writing so that your audience (us) can more completely enjoy this terrific tale!

I'm sorry Nightshadow needs perfection, since perfection is so hard to find. Yes, I suppose there are small errors here and there, but I was so wrapped up in the story and the emotion that I didn't notice them at all. Very nicely done, even if there were a few mistakes. They must have been minor, indeed, because the feelings I had are terrific!

This chapter, along with the previous one, was well thought out, written and presented

It's developing into a passionate love story I hope!

A lovely, well thought out continuation. I can't wait to read more.