All Comments on 'Natasha Gets It'

Prelude to the first office meeting felt rushed but not half as rushed as the last office visit. It sounded as though you couldn't wait to get the writing over with. Try reading what you wrote (best is to do it out loud to yourself), and see if it makes sense, there is enough detail or is simply rushed to a climax. You have the makings of a very good story - vetting more detail, feelings and observations could make it great.