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Ngl best story I've ever read

Parts of this story are absolutely amazing. Others, not so much. Take this one for instance:

"Then, as they walked away, Jack and Nicholas exchanged glances, and for once, Jack did not tease him and only looked back at him with a measure of respect. In turn, the partygoers around them slowly stopped staring at them and went back to enjoying themselves."

This rates the classic Iceman "[cough] bullshit" from the movie Top Gun. You can't paint Jack as a Stuckup Asshole one second and then flip flop him into a decent human being capable of showing someone respect. Short of Nicholas pulling Jack out of a burning car wreck or something huge like that, he's never going to show him respect of any kind. Arrogant bastards like that would have most likely interfered in retaliation for ruining his poon hunt. 😑

I understood what you wanted to achieve with your story, so I gave you a 4/5. But it's seriously flawed enough that it actually deserves a two instead. 🙄

Sweet