All Comments on 'One Night in Frisco'

It may be tacky to comment on my own story, but really I just want to encourage readers to comment. Reader comments tell me if I'm on the right track, or totally OFF track. So please give me your reaction to my work.

If you want a comment,I'll be glad to oblige. I think you writing is excellant --grammar vocabulary etc. I think your plot development is well done and skillfully built up. My criticism of your story is that it is ,in my opinion, totally unrealistic. Few people welcome strange couples into motel rooms and even fewer then have sex with wife of stranger while she is in bed with her husband and he is in bed with his wife. Final touch--what did she leave in his pocket?

60 year ol George

You have the makings of a great story. Looking forward to what was left in the pocket. A future meeting perhaps? Perhaps divorce of their disfunctional spouses? But is the grass truely greener on the other side of the frnce? Who knows where the story will lead but please continue. You are a very good writer. Looking forward to your next installment. Thank you.

I really enjoyed this. Very well written, and conveyed a lot in a short story, which is not easy to do. I actually found it pretty realistic as these type of stories go.

I hope you will consider a part 2. I enjoy your writing.

Realdoc

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I'd quite like to know what happens next! =)