All Comments on 'Pizza Boy'

That was terrible

That's disgusting. Just gross.

reads every LW and then tells us all he hates them. WTF is wrong with him? He's a closet cuck and his wife left him for a a cock more than 3 inches. 5 for a great LW story

Anytime that fool makes a comment the story earns a ONE star rating. Authors will soon learn that she cost them low scores.

I don't know what they're complaining about, this story isn't terrible or gross it's just short. A good start but it needs more to make it a full story.

A bad story...1st - Their son talks, acts and is treated as child and not as almost a man...2nd - The pizza boy and his family were friends of them...3rd - The pizza boy's mother give him head too...4th - Was her husband blind? Entered the house and din't notice nothing wrong? 5th - Did this woman respected or loved anyone? She didn't even respected herself and behaved worst than a street whore...1* MERRY XMAS TO ALL

If hubby is too cheap to buy soda from the Pizza Parlor, why would he pay to have the Pizza delivered, especially since he's going out to buy soda anyway? The biggest issue is I can't imagine that both her son and her husband wouldn't take one look at the both of them, recognize the "just fucked" look on their faces and SMELL the sex on them and in the room. Just too unbelievable, even for fiction. 1 star.

A simple good story with lots of possibilities.

Not as awful as some try to pretend. In fact, for a first try it's pretty good and I gave you a three. Why? The writing seemed hurried--you had the delivery boy at the door with no indication she'd even ordered the pizza. Then you have her almost jerking the kid inside and tipping him with a BJ; all with no build-up that she might have been 'that-kind-of-woman.'

On the plus side side you have set up the possibility for some interesting interaction between the delivery boy, her son and the other mother. If you should pursue that path, post in Taboo. The readers over there seem to have a greater understanding of how the reader-writer relationship works. This site has deteriorated to the point that fully half those who comment are simply in a pissing contest with each other and giving no consideration to the writers who provide them with FREE reading material. Check it out for yourself; how much constructive criticism did you receive on this story?

Keep trying!

As you do.

Great job, loved this story. xoxoxoxo Annette

I would love to see a second chapter to this

"not even my mom can do that."- This story belongs in the Incest section.

VOTE 1* FOR EVERY DEAR ANNONY COMMENT BY VASTIESMITH2 AKA BONNIETAYLOR2! OR WHATEVER YOU CALL YOURSELF! HOPEFULLY YOUR AIDS WILL DO ITS JOB SOON!!!

It wont be long before all of Tom's friends drop by for a BJ, and Tom sees in a bathroom stall "For Great BJ call Tom's Mom at BR 549" wont he be proud.

Desperate to suck cock is just a introduction

Next is pussy licking and fucking

Any woman who would blow most of the pizza guys I've seen is really a desperate whore.

For as short as it was, it was surprisingly good. It could’ve definitely been fleshed out more and there’s plenty more stories that could sprout from this seed.