All Comments on 'Seduction of the Grocery Boy Ch. 03'

I guess it's every young boy's fantasy to have a Mrs. Robinson. Hope there's more to cum!

Hot storyline but you need to get an editor. You are too wordy very often in your story. I've also noted the same wordiness in your other stories which I also enjoyed. For instance:

You say...Richard kept right on slowly moving in and out of her in a gentle slow motion... but with the help of an editor it might read... Richard continued to gently stroke his cock slowly in and out of her pussy.

I think it sounds better. I'm certainly not an editor but there are many available who could help you become a better writer.

In Part 4, Debbie needs to stop taking the Pill, and get accidently knocked up by a guy that she does not recall who it is that will be the Daddy.

Loved the twist with his two friends coming over. Would love to read part 4 if you're writing it. One suggestion for those of us who are very visual: Give us a really good description of our Cougar, Debbie. Would help. Very well done. Please keep up the writing!

*****This is a HOT Azz read. Thanks for sharing.