All Comments on 'Stepmother - an MILF in your House'

Story built well and had a good plot but got rushed to a finish. Once you capture the reader draw them in for the slow seduction and completion.

I agree with the other comments that it ended too quickly. Still a great story.

The building of the plot was good, but the quick jump into raw sex, without a bit more teasing and touching spread out over a week or so, made the overall story deflate.

The jump to the pregnancy was rather abrupt as well.

Take you time, stretch out the buildup to having sex, and make the pregnancy a bit more eventful and descriptive.

Best wishes

This story is beautiful in its simplicity. It can be added to, or left stand on it's own. It gets back to basics, not employing a complicated plot or other literary devices. It is just simply good storytelling. Tank you!

Great job, keep at it.

rushed ending otherwise ok.

Great story - well written