All Comments on 'Strawberry Blonds'

it's in the right catagory in my opinion. there were strong incestual overtones in the whole story right up till the point that he finds out the truth. a really good story.

I'm glad that she didn't have to testify, but who was the psycho bitch on the phone? Nice work, Scorpio44a!

First HDK and now Scorpio put good stories under the Incest title, am I going to have start reading that category. I do believe that it is Incest, but it certainly is not the hero's problem. As I commented somewhere else, he might run into trouble if he requested a marraige license but all their daughter needs is a birth certificate to get on with. Hmmm and the IRS??? Thanks Scorpio, excellent writing and story creation.

I can't answer the question of whether it is incest. All I know is I'm glad you put it there so I was sure to find it. Very well done. Entertaining and literate.

Awesome work. (A few minor writing flaws, but not enough to change my vote.) Truly, an innovative story line. It was a little disappointing to find out about the 20-year affair, but it serves to set up the resolution of the story. To answer your postscript question, it is arguable whether it belongs in Incest or in Romance; for the basic premise of the tale, I'd say you made the correct choice.

-- KK in Texas

<p>Since HDK had a story put in the incest category today I thought yours might be similar. But once I read your premise at the top I got curious enough to look at it</p>

<p>To answer your question, at least for me, when a man "<i>believes</i> that the person he's interested (be it his adopted daughter, step daughter, etc) at the time is his flesh and blood daughter, and he's wanting to have sex with her, then it's incest.</p>

<p>What this story is trying to argue is a technicality. Is it technically incest if after you want to have sex with your daughter and you tell her you love as a woman and have been struggling to not see her that way, and she says "oh by the way we're not really related, Mom cheated on you and I'm her lover's 'love child'" that doesn't stop it from being incest.</p>

<p>It was incest because he <b>believed</b> she was his flesh and blood, and the story never gave me any indication that he verified whether it was true (them not being blood related) and he was already lusting after her before he knew any different. And that just plain <b>"CREEPY"</b> and weird.</p>

<p>And to answer your question, if you don't know any different and your lusting after your daughter, under that situation it would be. You just found a way to have sex with the child who's diapers you personally changed, puke you washed off, and helped raise for over 20 years. Now you want to have sex with her, and Oh surprise your not related so having her as a living vessel for your lust now is ok as well. EWWWWWWWW!!!</p>

-Risq

SCORPIO, I really enjoyed this one. A clever plot and strong primary characters make it excellent reading. Of course the tale should be in the Incest category, Megan was, after all, the product of incest and Nick certainly had incestuous thoughts. Nice work! By the way, What happened to the bitch on the phone? Pete.

I'm not a fan of incest stories, but this did not seem like an incest story, just a loving couples story. Nice writing Scorpio.

the ct. Yankee

Love and commitment is the only thing that really matters. Even if she was his blood relative it still wouldn't mean she would love him any less.A very well written story and placed in the right genre. Thanks......Rich

I like your style.

Nothing wrong with vulgar words, but you do not use them, and still get the desired effect.

I wouldn't have placed it anywhere else. Excellent story line, I enjoyed it a lot

This was an amazing story and I truly enjoyed it. I don't like incest stories but this was wonderful. Thank you for sharing.

was well writing

As it ends it is a "Mature" story and really it is when they consumate. Thank You!

This is an incest story, I agree with what you said at the beginning. I think that a lot of people just associate incest with related people but if a father takes care of his wife's child in marriage then it's his child from then on. Excellent story...the abuse did make me tearful, which means I really do have emotions...

You never cease to amaze me pete. Great story once again. Keep up the great work. The Princess

Scorpio, this is the first time I have ever left comment on here but had to say somethign about this story. I absolutely loved it even with out the content of an abundant amount of graphic sexual details.

I also believe you hae it in the correct category, although it maybe fits more into the "mature" but if you had put it there the surprise ending would not have been as good

If I were in his position, the outrage, the urge to protect, and the intimacy of nursing her would probably go in the same direction. Beautifully done.

I could have written this story. We are 6 years happy.

Loved this story too !

I believe the taboo of incest is for at least two reasons; to minimize inbreeding health problems and to protect minors from mental and emotional abuse.

Doctors and prospective spouses need to know family history!

Handled well, with caring and understanding. For those that have concerns over the incest angle, don't. Treat this as what it is...A love story that has some sex in it.

Mike

The abuse also makes me tear up. I was in love with my best friends wife's sister for a long time, We even dated for awhile before we decided just to be friends with benefits. That lasted until she hooked up with the bad boy band member. Of course he went no where, is a total loser, and constantly beats her. I can't even allow myself to see her anymore because even as each time the abuse is worse she continues to go back to him. I had to wash my hands of the whole affair because it was too painful to see her like that every time. Maybe this country will start taking this crime against women seriously and these guys will get the prison time they deserve.

Scorpio

Another great loving story, but if there is no blood relationship there is no incest, no matter what the thoughts might be. Thoughts don't get you in legal trouble, acting on them CAN.

It was a great and touching story. Look at it this way incest brought her into his world, at most she is his step daughter and society still frowns on that. Keep up the great work.

Great story and great writing ... and even a few tips for men on how to please a woman by listening

I love happy endings and this one hits the spot.

I agree that since there is no blood relationship it's not incest but true

love and caring.

Well written and well conceived..........congratulations on a job well done.

Hope there will be more.

This is the best story I've read so far ! But just out of curiosity, who's the psycho bitch that threatened your wife ?

hey fantastic story and i know exactly where it needs to be. thats in everyones favorites. its in mine .keep it up.

What little I know of you, I know a lot of thought and soul searcing went into this story.

If you ask me to draw the line as to what is and is not "taboo", I would have to say the two primary issues are

1 is there a possibility of negative biological implications, (Gee Dear I dont know why our kids are cross eyed, we are only first cousins)

2 are the partners of legal age and equally agree to the actions.

If those two criteria are met anything else is pure nonsense hatched up by ultra moralistic individuals who, for what ever reason feel they can pass judgemets; without not even caring to get the facts.

Along these same lines it utterly mystifies me how a woman can have a man friend and it is ok, but the moment a man has a woman friend there is "something" going on

True and unconditional love does not abide by relationships or gender rules and that is what you are really talking about

Some people might get confused but there is no problem here at all -

There is however great goodness and a simple story line - with only one loose end -

Why bring the vindictive bitch into it and not deal with her??

Great writing as always thanks -

. . . but plenty of opportunities for people to try to impose their moral code on "evildoers". Keep sharing your gift with us, Scorp. Your writing is great.

Thank you.

The story is good. Very good. Your writing style is fluid and natural, no bumps or jarring jumps.

There is a slight lack of detail when it comes to the actual sex, a vagueness that allows the reader's imagination to wander a bit into personal fantasy without being bluntly imageless... but it left me wanting a little more. 4/5 on plot and originality, 4/5 on style, but i'm putting you right in the middle with a 2.5/5 on detail - for this story.

This is the first of your work I have read and critiqued and I am excited to continue through the rest of your repertoire.

Sorry but I really can't decide where you should put the story. It fits as an impressive story which got to me.

The category it belongs in is incest/taboo, because even though a step daughter isnt incest, its still got to be considered taboo.

Not a bad story and not impossible, but unlikely. There is really good evidence to suggest the early parts of puberty trigger associations to the people you with that prevent them from being sexually arousing to you.

I don't care where you put your stories, I'll read them, probably more than once or twice. With 134,577 views of this story, I think you did just fine. I check for new stories every so often, and almost as often go back to a favorite.

I think that romance is the most appropriate.

Ed Grocott

edgrocott@gmail.com

..After she went back to sleep I let my anger out, quietly. I wanted to leave my house and go find Tom... slowly torture him and watch him die. I also felt bad for him. I knew he loved Megan and had to feel shitty for hurting her. Just not enough.

@@@ They wouldn't have to worry about arresting tom, I'd invite a few buddies over to play poker for a good alibi and then go help tom find a nice, deep hole to sleep in, permanently. @@@

I had learned that when a woman tells me about stuff she wants me to listen, not fix, not suggest or coach. A few times I think my tongue bled from being bitten hard, but I didn't butt in. I listened. I believed they would learn valuable lessons from this adversit

@@@ I usually give good advice afterwards, though they rarely listen and see the value of it after the fact :( @@@

The next evening he came to my home and apologized, promised it would never happen again and begged her to go home. She went. I bit my tongue. I told myself they were both adults and needed to work things out between themselves.

@@@ I would have taken him out in the back yard and beat the fucking shit out of him until he understood what consequences were. Either that or beat his ass, tied him up and invited a big gay friend over for a virgin freebee, heh. Understand what 'no' means now bitch?? @@@

She said he was wrong and tried to reason with him. When she got close to him he lashed out with his fists and knocked her to the floor. He kicked her and then picked her up and threw her out the back door into their yard. She lay there bleeding and broken, waiting for and expecting him to kill her when she heard his car start and drive away.

@@@ Oh, I'd have killed the son of a butch for sure! @@@

I used to sit when I peed when Sara was still asleep.

@@@ Thats funny because when Im at home I always sit and pee so I dont have to worry about cleaning anything, heh. @@@

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"How do you feel about starting a new family?"

"I'm fifty-two. If we have a child together this year I'll be seventy when he graduates from high school!"

@@@ oh hell no, Im too damned old to be raising another kiddo! Leave that to someone younger with the energy to change diapers and chase kids all over, lol! Screw that! A nice, quiet life with my girl, thankyouverymuch! :) @@@

I touched and tasted her for most of Saturday. We joined, had breakfast. Coupled and played and had sandwiches. We laughed, sucked, fingered and came before dressing and going out for dinner at the beach near the Santa Monica pier.

@@@ Really? This is what we get for their first time(s) together?! I feel cheated!! @@@

I sucked on her wonderful nipples and she made all the appropriate noises.

@@@ sounds like he's having sex with an android he just made, lol! @@@

She crested a number of times then begged, "Please be inside me, my husband."

@@@ This has to be the weirdest descriptions for a sex scene Ive ever read! Lol. 'Crested a number of times' sounds like some kind of biological function of a cold blooded lizard... Laying eggs in a sand nest or something, heh. 'Please be inside me, my husband' sounds more victorian, not like anything anyone would normally say... And the phrasing sounds like she's talking to herself in her head, not to someone else. Very odd! @@@

We mated in tenderness, and with force. I pushed into her and she rode me as if we were in the rodeo. Her breasts were kissed, mauled and sucked.

@@@ Mated?? Back to animal descriptions or trying to get her pregnant... How can you do it in tenderness, with force? Nothing tender when I'm slamming into my girl! I guess she was on top... That phrasing again! Just say 'she rode me like a cowgirl' or 'she rode me hard and put me up wet!' Lol. ...and for heaven sakes, use present tense so it sounds like its happening! Sigh. @@@

She was in the kitchen. I could smell the coffee and heard the sounds of cooking. I called out, "Is there any food?"

@@@ (Im sorry, this is just too much fun!) "No, making coffee and Im frying up eggs and bacon for the dog that you forgot to feed and water when you got home last night! Oh wait, thats you, nevermind! ;). (See? Too easy!!;) @@@

When the food was gone she put the platter on the floor and sucked me dry as her dessert.

@@@ Who out there actually feels like having sex right after they eat? @@@

"Rings! You have to have rings on at work tomorrow!"

Suddenly I was all alone in bed. The water turned on in the bathroom and she called out, "Get a move on, husband! We have places to go and rings to buy!"

@@@ Now THAT is as realistic as it gets!! Hehehehe ;) @@@

Now, not to say that the story was bad... The actual story/plot was pretty interesting! Just the way it was told, the phrasing, language, tense and lack of an actual actively told sex scene, especially considering the shortness of the story, really distracted and detracted from what I thought was going to be a longer and seemingly original piece. Thanks for writing though, it was still enjoyable, even if I did have fun with it! ;)

OK story, but felt dry.

This is the correct section for the story, since this is the incest/taboo section. Both are represented here: she is the product of incest. Taboo, since she grew as his daughter, this would be considered a no-no enywhere.

A lot of girls love their daddies. A girl from born from an affair. Can love the man

that raised her from birth even if she cam from an affair.

In your story you pose the question as to whether the main characters engaged in incest or not. The answer is..."Depends on where they live." If it is California like the story makes it sound, than no. Legally there was no crime. Some other U.S. states would be a different matter entirely. (Alabama, Arkansas, and Colorado, to name just a few)

Why would he feel the slightest bit sorry for Tom? only the worst of scum beat up a woman they proclaim to love.

As a father to the beaten woman he shouldn't feel the slightest bit sorry for him, but just want to kill him.

How about "Loving Wife" she was married to the A_shole Tom in the beginning. and nothing transpired between them until after the divorce was final and she got the DNA test to prove she was not his Daughter.

The trash can is where this story belongs!

Quite enjoyed the story! Daddy had remarkable powers of restraint. Many fathers would have tried to make Tom pay big time but daddy allowed the court system do the job!! Deceased wife was forced to live a lie undoubtedly with a troubled mind.

I think all three are equally applicable! Personally I don't think the story was incest and what I and anyone else thinks is is irrelevant. Incest is defined by the law. And the laws are defined by the states which can vary from state. Incest as the reader can see by doing a search on the internet is illegal in every state in the union. But one needs to consider the reasons for incest being illegal in the first place. It is my understanding that incest was outlawed to keep family members from bringing inbred children into the world who may be badly deformed mentally or physically. In this case he and she were not blood relations. My big question then comes down to why marriage makes it incest if this pair were not blood relations. It simply doesn't make sense. But, who the hell said all laws make sense especially if the are proposed and voted on by lawyers. And that is a contradiction in terms - lawyers and making sense!!! The defense rests its case and the jury can rule on the case. Ha!

Beautiful story. Thanks for sharing it.

Good story and well thought out. The stupidity of the legal system is mind boggling concerning incest. It can’t be incest if their is no blood relation. This is church based stupidity.

Ignore the nay sayers. This is a seriously good story. Well written. Hopefully we can expect more from you.

And... another one clean out of the ball park.

Thank you!

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Que Romantique!

11/10!!!!!