All Comments on 'Substitute'

Loved it!!!

You are a wonderfully descriptive writer. You also do a wonderful job developing your characters. I loved you and Ricky immediately. You even did a great job with Jimmy, because although I liked him too, you made me mad at him when he couldn't handle your infertility. Here is my "but". I struggle with Jimmy's ability to accept the baby. If he couldn't deal with the infertility, then how does he deal with the fact that someone else was able to impregnate you? In the end, I suppose you could argue that he let you off the hook because the father of the baby was dead and he had to forgive him. Once again, you did a wonderful job with this story. Keep up the good work.

Believable story plot.

Your story while not the usual kind of fare for this genre, definitely hit a chord. Please keep writing.

Good story but a sad ending. I hope to see more of the author's work soon.

I don't often read incest stories - your characters were caring people who actually had more than one dimension - thank you so much for taking the time to write this story.

A wonderful story, please keep up the excellent writing!

Excellent Story. Thank you

Loved the story easy reading was sorry that Ricky died and would not be there for the birth and bringing up of his and Jennifer's child...

Very good story until the silly/goofy ending.

So your idea of a happy ending is her loser of a husband moving back in and ricky being kicked to the curb

Did enjoy that. What a fortunate young man he was, until?

never and get your verbs correct

I was thinking for most of this read, that the usual airs and graces that typically imbue your writing were not evident. Then suddenly what was cheap and blatent had gone into the mystic. To me, on some ineffable level, she knew they didn't have forever and what happened was all the barriers collapsing to show love in every possible way.

I have so enjoyed your other work. But this one is now my favorite. Thank you . I'm not sure what inspired this to come from you, but it cannot have been ordinary.

That was a fucked up ending on 2 accounts 1 the kid dies after a week fucking the girl and 2 she finds out she is pregnant and moves her husband back in she turned out to be a slut all this just a few weeks after the funeral

I so enjoyed this story that I gave you 5 stars which is something I very rarely do. Keep writing.

Well written with a heck of an ending. Keep up the good stories!

Superb!